Alone in the corner of my dark room
Candles casting shadows upon the walls
Tears cascading down my face
Blood seeping from weak arms
I wasn't always like this, because...
...He used to love me...
Walks down main street
Kisses so sweet
Smiles and laughter
Shared nights together in bed
With "Carrie"
...I used to be that carrie...
I wasn't always this puddle of misery and pain
I wasn't always so broken
I once smiles with sincerity
Just like you
I used to love with all I had
...Just like you
But that was when he loved me
That was when, I felt I had a purpose
Alone in my darkened room
This delicate beauty has been shattered
Candle light casting shadows against the walls
Telling stories of how she once was
Her radiance and happiness shined ever so bright
...But that was when he loved me...
Author notes
this was a quick write...something that I found out a few minutes ago..."he doesnt love me anymore" and that inspired this write
A contest entry
- Lost love by cutekitten789.
500 points, ended September 29, 2007, 15 entries
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So touching and beautiful here, just so heartfelt, the pain and smile back then, when everything is love, oh the memories again...
Amazing and beyond as always from you
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NICE WRITE i loved it and how u told it
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i really like this...for a quick write you did very well...i love this line:
I used to love with all I had
...Just like you
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I Like
I like your poetry.
(Your wrote on my guest book a month ago)
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Its awesome and i can see where your coming from!
"Shared nights together in bed
With "Carrie"
...I used to be that carrie..."
I love that line.
Tara x
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thank you so much for the comment, I really apreciate it. And I am glad that you commented on this peice. once again, thank you
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