on a rainy day
birds' meal
only water
on a rainy day
instead of dawn choir
pitter-patter
on a rainy day
bird's song
drenched
Author notes
Image #23
In a list
A contest entry
- The Avatar Haiku Contest by NoWayJo.
600 points, ended September 16, 2007, 30 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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on a rainy day
bird's song
drenched
WOW! I love this(the last haiku)!!! Its brilliant, Mina ji! It is awesome, really. Congrats on the Bronze!
Charishma
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Hey Mina
This is a wonderful poem.
Beautifully written.
Congrats on the bronze!
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Thank you Mins...
Hey India beat Pakistan...
Chak De India
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All three are nice but like the last one the best."bird's song drenched" brings beautiful images to mind.Well- done and best of luck!!
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Thank you Sonju, your words are always drenched with kindness...
mina
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I really like this haiku-chain which works so well with this avatar-image. My most favorite of the chain is #3--The last line seems so unexpected and the last-line "drenched" is an evocative image of the scene in one single word.
Thank you so much for this entry to the contest, Mina!
Jo
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much better
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in lieu of? How busines like!!!!! but I like the thought. It is sweet and I can hear the pitter patter.
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Thanx...I've changed it to "instead" - which means same as in-ieu
mina
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Interesting haiku chain. Wish you the best.
~Sonja~
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good attempt at this form of poetry I think it has good imagery-there is some excellent advice about writing haiku at haikumonk's contents page- it really helped me to understand the art of writing haiku
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Fantastic
A nice one. It makes me sympathise with the poor birds who have got nowhere to go and eat in the rain. I too had seen a little mother pigeon who delivered her baby egg in her nest in our college when it was pouring severely yesterday. Lovely poem.
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