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infractus

Missing image

I could have touched it;
this absence of you.


The way it grew, a small stone
laying heavy
twisting my insides.


My head bent
by conspiracy
scarred by memories,
fought gravitation.


Split open in the backwash,
grazed in the aftermath
fragments of me
were scattered.


Loneliness crushed
tomorrow.   

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For my earthly love..

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  • tara wilson gold member
    December 9, 2007
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    yeah - this is you then...lol..I remembered this amazing poem


  • Peteskid gold member
    December 6, 2007

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    in a small poem, a mood, a dominant feeling, expression and eloquence; an experience for the reader of someone's deeper feelings, so very well done...PK

  • vertigo beat
    November 18, 2007
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    Your first two lines got me. This was beautiful.


  • Sau
    November 17, 2007
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    excellent

    • Evil Eyes gold member
      November 18, 2007
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      I think I have come a long way since we first joined.. What do you think?

      And Thank You..


      • Sau
        November 19, 2007
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        I agree, and have been through a similar experience. Time is an awesome ship, isn't it?


  • Zayra Yves
    September 13, 2007

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    There are some choice lines in this petite poem that really hit home when it comes to feeling absence that is palpable. Excellent writting and profoundly sad.

    • Evil Eyes gold member
      September 13, 2007
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      Thank You.. I found a bit of myself in this one..
      Glad you liked it.


  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    September 10, 2007

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    Wonderful Work

    I love this you know. I love the words that you have used. I love the flow and the imagination in this. This is very very beautiful. Wonderful work.

    All the best
    Wayne
    x

    • Evil Eyes gold member
      September 10, 2007
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      Thank You for reading and I always like knowing someone appreciates what I write.

      Take Care,
      Catressa

  • tara wilson gold member
    September 1, 2007
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    I really like this one a lot - wonderful poetry
    I love your beginning lines..totally sets the mood of this poem..


  • Watuwant silver member
    August 28, 2007
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    Every now and then I get to go off fishing all by myself, which is always fun. Yet invariably I begin to feel the ache of wanting to see my wife, and even the kids. Almost as if my time alone can only last so long before the "missing them" gene kicks in.
    A haunting, touching poem.
    peace
    doug


  • Ogreatbaldone gold member
    August 27, 2007
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    stunning dear Cat


  • arafura gold member
    August 27, 2007

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    earthly love...

    Excellent work my friend! There is a haunting sense of lonliness and of loss in this. You have painted your picture very well! The imagery is clear and plucks the heart strings...
    Well done. Good luck in the contest!


  • poetryality silver member
    August 27, 2007

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    Beautifully sad my sister. There is great haunting in these words. Measures of time passed is not enough to persuade the spirit to settle beyond some things that happen in our lives. I feel the pain you share with these words and pray for that soothing balm that the Great Comforter can give in an instant. I wish I could hug you.

    The best to you in the challenge pretty lady!



    Always with LOVE & Much Respect ♥

    Renee

    • Evil Eyes gold member
      August 27, 2007
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      I am fine sweet one.. This is simply for a contest..
      But Thank you so much for caring..

      I was simply remembering a feeling I had when someone I loved was away for a while..



      Take care, be safe,
      Cat


  • amaranthine lover gold member
    August 27, 2007
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    this is beautiful!


  • Night Hope gold member
    August 27, 2007

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    "I could have touched it;
    this absence of you."

    Grief is palpable. We can physically feel it. It IS heavy, like a stone lodged in our hearts, weighing us down, keeping us below the surface. It is a destroyer of worlds, a silencer of words. It is a very precious, private thing; even if someone loses the same person you do, they will "deal with it" differently. This is an eloquent ache of a poem, my Friend. Oh, how I wish for your peace. Good luck in Zayra's contest, Sweetie. Wanda

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