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the night turned sour
into a bad acid trip
walking the darken rivers edge
a thing creature appeared
razor sharp teeth with forked tongue
looked to be dripping in a red liquid
he then grabbed me

and poured warm blood
over my clamoring skin
my body became instantly

numb
for his teeth are now

inside my brain
sucking every corpuscle

of knowledge
my numb empty void

fell to the ground
with the slicing of my wrist
I died to be in hell's torture
of horrendous sights

in the flaming darkness

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  • AshtrayBaby
    August 28, 2007

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    "for his teeth are now
    inside my brain
    sucking every corpuscle
    of knowledge"

    God, I love that part. I love anything that has to do with like teeth put together with brains or tongue with brains or whatever. I've written a couple of poems with that tongue/brain metaphor thing.

    Anyways, this was really wonderful and thank you for entering!