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Stolen Childhood

She sat on a rock beside the river,
Aimlessly piercing through all that she could see.
Her eyes lingered carelessly far and beyond,
But never inside.
At such a tender age,
She grew to dislike the image they all painted
Making innocence sing a heartbreaking tune.
Lyric upon lyric,
Her childhood became devoured,
For she could not even see the childlike reflection in the water.
Sadly she placed her head in her hands,
And wept from dusk until dawn until forever more.
The beauty in her little face faded.
All that were left were marks of sadness
And tearless eyes,
But she still cried.

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This just came to me so it's not personal....Just poetry....

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  • BuriedTreasures silver member
    February 29, 2008

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    Excellent Composition and i can relate to the theme!!
    Very well written & Versed and a sad message!
    If you get a chance, click on the link below--
    I Know you will relate to it! Thanks

    http://allpoetry.com/poem/3953989

  • EmotionallyBeaten
    August 31, 2007

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    understood,and loved

    Love for the little gurl who had none! I luv the sensory, u make it so easy to connect with the pain and the loss of something alot of us dont get!GOOD JOB


  • Jessica Lynn
    August 31, 2007

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    This is a very sad, yet sweet poem! I enjoyed reading it! You could use a little bit smoother transitions between your lines but other than that it was a good write! keep it up.

    Jessic


  • brat09brunette
    August 30, 2007
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    wow this is really awesome...


  • ObituaryBirthday
    August 30, 2007
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    wow..very beautifully written..even if it wasnt personal..great write.


  • Arizona Sunset
    August 30, 2007

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    Wow

    This was personal for me, beautifully written. It brought to me the many times I felt this way in life. You used great imagery, because I could put myself into this poem.I could feel the loss of the childhood. Your title was perfect for the content, You drew me into the poem in the beginning, and left me feeling the saddness in your last lines. Great job, thank you for sharing!


  • JinSays gold member
    August 30, 2007
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    Oh, this is so very sad. Lovely imagery of this girl gazing into the water. Very nice!
    Jin


  • edit my world.
    August 29, 2007

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    wow...
    i really felt the sadness behind this...
    this was really great! Grrrrrreat write!! ^_^
    <3Dani

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