You are a.w.o.l.
you had to leave-
this I know.
But who said you could?
who gave you permission?
You may be Absent
from this Earth
But yet you live on
in my heart- Forever
Without you near
things just are not the same.
One day, I am sure
I will take my leave too-
Then don't you see?
Together we will be
A.W.O.L.
Watching over those
we love and left
behind.
Author notes
Inspired by something my son, Justin said today....
For all that have passed on before me. My Grandma, Dad, Larry... and many others that I have not named, but are included in this write.
A contest entry
- For The Deceased by DeadlyTurnip.
1550 points, ended March 24, 2008, 31 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Awwww
This is gorgeous, a positive way of showing love living in a heart and memories. Beautifully crafted. and
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lovely write.......I am getting to know your style well now and I love it...well done my sister...
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Thank you for this entry, I enjoyed the read. The last stanza was my favorite, even if it wasn't really supposed to mean much the spaces at the beginning of the last line brought the poem to another level for me. Apoligies if that doesn't make sense
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Thanks for the wonderful comment on this one and the Bronze. I got the idea for this one from something my son said...
Glad you liked it!
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Thanks for this entry. I have put it in the book.
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oh! beautiful...gets one thinking alright!
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AWOL together. That thought brings a smile, very creative concept in that line, this was penned with a loving touch. Well done.
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Wow!!
Now this is certainly a different piece but I felt at peace after reading Your words...
Love this one You have penned Sweet Soul!
Oy~ I so miss the ones who have passed before me...
the physical connection...
Thank You for sharing this!!
Best wishes to You
Many blessings too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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I am glad you felt at piece after reading it, I felt the same peace after writing this one.. Made me realize that those we love, are just a.w.o.l. but will always be in our hearts... and one day we will join them too. I knew that before, but for some reason this piece just brought it all home for me.
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This is so true! How can those we love leave us behind with broken hearts? How can they dissappear from our lives and not our hearts?
Love,
Amera ♥
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I really love this piece. I think it expresses several of the emotions we feel when we lose someone we love - that little bit of anger and disbelief: "Who gave you permission?" then the ache of missing that person: "Without you near
things just are not the same." and finally acceptance and happiness that someday we'll be together again:
"Together we will be
A.W.O.L.
Watching over those
we love and left
behind."
A beautiful job on this!
~J.
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An emotional piece that made me think of loved ones lost...and how some day we'll all be reunited. Great job!
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memory and memories of those gone before are imprinted into us our children speak sometimes and take our breath away.
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this is very good you made me think about the people ive lost andhow much i miss them good piece!
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A VERY BEAUTIFUL PIECE, INDEED - FROM A VERY BEAUTIFUL WOMAN!
I thought this was about LionsLove as you've written may emotional, heartfelt, and soulful pieces about him - or was it about your first love who I believe is waiting for you up in Heaven, too? Whomsoever it is about it was a fine piece, indeed - and I THANK YOU - as always for sharing it with me! on this very Blue Monday!
Love & Peace!
Earl.
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