A heart,
Screaming out in terror,
Things never felt before.
Longing to again be hidden.
Hidden away from your searching eyes.
Crying out in fear.
Things unknown.
Sorrows slipping,
Slipping silently away.
It's fear I feel.
Fear of loving you.
Afraid of your happiness.
It reflects brightly in your eyes.
A love so pure.
So very true,
A heart,
So completely honest.
Calling out in gentle tones.
Teaching things,
Things i've never felt before
Exposed to you.
To the world.
Mesmerized by your eyes.
Whispering in quiet awe.
Understanding.
Pain vanquished.
Love so gentle.
So very perfect.
A heart,
That belongs,
Completely,
To you.
To your eyes.
To your forgiving soul.
A good poet can only be good if they can take critisism correctly and effeicently...
Comments
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your short lines work perfectly in this poem. you desribe this love very well. I liked it alot. I really liked it. This is a great and strong and enriching love that you have described.
One thing:
"It's fear I feel.
Fear of loving you.
Afraid of your happiness."
A lot of us fear the unknown but when love is clearly displayed, we should embrace it. Welcome it, meet it, feed it, shake its hand even.
I'm excited about your poem!
Oneal
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This is beautiful and full of emotion, I enjoyed reading it very much, keep writing!
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Thank you so much...its nice to hear words of praise every so often...lol..your opinions mean alot to me...
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