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Blood Rite

It is a serious condition, they say,
certified and verified
by the AMA,
the National Psychiatric Guild,
God only knows how many others
have poked and probed and studied,
have bothered

themselves with those like me.
It is a condition—true—but all I know
is that sweet, waiting pain when I scrape
blunt nails (purposely pared with one
ragged edge) along the nape
of crisp-dried blood.

I know the sharp tug of nail
on clotted scab, lifting a brittle edge,
pulling harder, then the swell
of brightness beneath,
red pulsing brightness, subtle wedge
of flame unsheathed.

I scrape again, releasing
now the unfettered flow—and watch
it pool across the furrows of my flesh
in pleasing,
random patterns—see it catch
on white-ridged scars and fresh,

still-tender welts.
I watch, mesmerized. I smell
warm blood-scent. I touch the back
of hand to lips and melt
all inhibitions as my salty self
merges, tongue to skin,
completes my secret pact.


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  • Jade-
    January 21, 2008

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    Hey,

    This is very good. I'm not the best "judge" but I can simply say, I liked it. I liked the choice of words especially, and it is very poetic. Sorry I can't be better to judge.

    Thanks for entering my contest, best of luck!

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  • CarolDesjarlais silver member
    December 29, 2007
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    OMG, you say it oh so much better than I....owieeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee


    • micol
      December 29, 2007
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      I don't agree, but thanks anyway. I'm lucky; I have a sensitive wife who keeps gently reminding me not to tear away at myself. Sometimes it works.

      Thanks again.


  • TheShadowsOfMe
    October 24, 2007
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    I like it like maggie said It takes you to the dark side but you forgot disease name in author notes


    Good luck in the contest


  • maggiejamespoet silver member
    September 6, 2007
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    This poem kept me on the edge of the chair--glad it is not dark yet. I keep reading the last stanza, especially "...I watch mesmerized." That is the feeling I get when I read the entire poem. It takes you to the dark side, the one we try and deny and you read "mesmerized." Good luck in the contest!

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