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Deceiving Eyes

Alone I sit on my bitter wooden floor
that seems so diminutive and insecure
Gazing at my reflection that use to excel
with innocence ole’ so pure

Though the haze has blurred my vision
of what I use to see
For that girl that stares back at me,
shows merely someone that I use to be

I glare into her eyes,
hoping to discover the answers that I need
Though her eyes, such cloudy green;
only stare to mislead

I use to look at that same girl and grin,
after all she’d assist me to achieve
Though her eyes began to not pursue my path
and soon they began to deceive

We use to find love;
It use to stream on track
That imprudent girl, that I gaze at, ruined everything
and its now daunting to look back

Still despite how hard I strive to hide from her,
our heart still beats that same song
And even when I wish I could leave her behind,
I find myself following along

This Girl I stare at in this mirror,
is someone who I'm not familiar with and may never know
Yet when I raise my wrist up,
she has the identical scars to show

She has, no doubt, became my enemy;
someone I’d never want to be
Someone who’s lived wrong, someone who’s failed,
someone who looks a lot like me.

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  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    August 28, 2007

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    writingismycure

    I enjoyed the scattered rhyme with this write, it brings in the Uniqueness of the write, the depth and paints the picture

    Fabulous
    Thank you very much for your entry
    Best of luck
    Stay safe
    ~Amanda