I sit alone in an empty wood,
All my family is gone.
I would save others if I could,
I sit alone in an empty wood.
No others live nearby, as they should,
Humans knocked them down head on,
I sit alone in an empty wood,
All my family is gone.
Author notes
One of my first triolets. Hope you like it!
A contest entry
- Triolets! Come in! by DeadlyTurnip.
800 points, ended August 31, 2007, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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you did great I like this part: " all my family is gone"
I didn't like this because it sounds awkward: "I sit alone in a empty wood"
My emotional responce is that I feel like the tree
and what It's trying to say to the liseners. I love the ryming! Also in the first line: "I sit alone in an empty wood" I feels like you can be in any woods you choose.
It would of been better if you had ryming two lines.
Other then that GREAT JOB, THEE APLAUSE FOR KATHRYN! FANTASTIC! ON THE SPOT!
I really like that.
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Kathryn, thanks for entering! This was a really good poem, the rhyming was perfect.
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simplicity and a calling
I enjoyed this simple poem, it's loneliness and tragedy.
So many of us when feeling loneliness seek out the woods
and sit under a tree, if there were no woods of trees,
I can't see me finding peace under the local highway
sign or newest mall eve.
Thankyou for your poem.
ears2hearyou
Kathleen
the rebel in me would have added the word
"carnivorous" humans knocked them down...
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