anything terrestrial
is truly inconsequential
when the focus is on the celestial
compared to what's beyond Terra
the chilly majesty of space's aurora
to believe simply hydrogen
and its cousin nitrogen
might combine once and again
to create a beauty, blazing!
which is uniquely amazing
No less astounding is their death
More dramatic than a ceasing of breath
Because far beyond our glowing Luna
There may be a gigantic super nova!
An explosion of light! and might, then night...
Scattered far out within the dark skies
settles the cosmic dust of nearby neighbors
The refractive gleam as it finally dies
this tribute to the divine strength of stars
Author notes
Took forever to write this. Forgive the lapse of my rhyme scheme at the end; it was designed so to attract attention as well as to end on a more serious note. Rhyming takes away a certain something in drama.
A contest entry
- Round one of four by Fire Opal, grannyeri, jess09stevenson, x Empathic Rose x, and IndividualEleven. by IndividualEleven.
800 points, ended September 8, 2007, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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very nice, that third stanza was incredible, I agree with my fellow judges, a fantastic piece, rhymes, flow, and vocabulary was impressive! well done and thanks for entering!!!
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You Betcha!
I will start off by saying that your choice of title sucked me right in to want to see what this poem was going to be all about! Great choice. Secondly, as I began reading each line carefully, while giving it some good thought, I thought, she's got me hooked to want to read on. You used some clever rhymes as well as sharing a good little story with this and I wish you well in the contest too! thanks for sharing and keep writing. joy
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"No less astounding is their death
More dramatic than a ceasing of breath
Because far beyond our glowing Luna
There may be a gigantic super nova!"
Fantastic love the rhyme scheme here. and the impact of your descripotions had upon me. i could picture it all happening and that is the true art of poetry. I can see that this must have taken ages.
"Scattered far out within the dark skies
settles the cosmic dust of nearby neighbors
The refractive gleam as it finally dies
this tribute to the divine strength of stars"
I loved the ending and the way you took away the rhyme. It left a dramatic ending that mirrors the end of the stars and the ending of the poem. Truly amazing.
I LOVED THIS ONE
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Wow - to get a rhyming poem out of all those words in the list is really quite something. Such oddball words that you have used and made a connection to and with - I am impressed. Very well written - good job. Takes talent to make the rhyme work as you have here. Thanks for entering.
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Thank you; that means a lot. It was really hard to do...
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