wife waving goodbye
to dutiful husband-
punch bag
Author notes
Image #13 used for inspiration.
A contest entry
- The Avatar Haiku Contest by NoWayJo.
600 points, ended September 16, 2007, 30 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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haha .. this is really funny,
HUsnabds are like punch bags - do need to punch them once in a while. May'be they'll be more sensible!
All the best and keep writing
Never ♥
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You have a very unique way of drawing interpretation of images to haiku-form, Raist. Even without the avatar image, it's to sense the punching-bag hen-pecked sort of husband leaving, even if it's only for work in the morning by this haiku...
Thank you so much for this entry to the contest!
Jo
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I don't quite get it-
Is she the punch bag and leaving him? If so, how is he dutiful? Or have I missed the whole point?
I like this- I just want to know what your thoughts were.
Good luck in this contest.
qt
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The image I had in my head was a contrast between what the world sees (a harmonious household with the wife waving goodbye to her dutiful husband as he leaves for work) and the reality behind the closed doors.
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Well, it seems obvious to me now- thanks for the explaination.
:-)qt
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Beautiful.... Good luck
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