if I could take
all the tears I cried
over you
they wouldn't even fill
an ocean
if I could take
all the hugs we've exchanged
they would not be able to cover
the land of hugs
if that place existed
if I could recall
all the times
you made me laugh
even ten cans of laughing gas
would not match up
and if I took
all the times you were there
even birds of a feather
would look
like enemies
everything's erased
from my mind
until recently
I remembered
you-
just when that thought
struck me
I remembered
you have forgotten me
Author notes
quote~ "I dont know whats harder, forgetting to remember you, or remembering you forgot me."
A contest entry
- ~Sweet Mushrooms~ You Got Options!!!!!! by DevinCora.
1150 points, ended August 31, 2007, 12 entries
Honorable mention
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There's real emotions behind the words, but the poem feels cold. Almost empty.
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I liked it alot!!!! It was very moving, I loved how you used the quote..... but to be honest you portrayed the quote good enough for me to tell, and thats really good because you didnt put the option in the author notes!!!!!!! Just letting you know because I would hate to DQ you..... and please message me when you put it in so I can make sure before I judge!!!!!!
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errr... i just read the comment once again... and i made a spelling mistake... FACINATING*
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it's fascinating lah you baffoon! no offence.
NEAHAHA
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oh yea... my finger slipped... once again! hey, ppl make mistakes ok! *smile*
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OOOH APARNA... this was facination... this was sooo sad... Don't cry... though i just might if i read this again...
Well i have to compliment, you have an unbelievable talent in writing sad poems that reach the audience's hearts!!! And it melts their hearts too... its so well written and beautifully phrased!!!
Well, to tell you the truth, Whoever this friend you write to, i bet has not forgotten you matey!!! Cuz you are such a wonderful friend that no one can ever for get you... You are funny, pretty pretty. smart, funny and you always have good advices for people in need! You're always there when someone has lost all hopes in life and just doesn't know what to do! U r always by their side!!!
Well, u r a great friend and i bet you that whoever has entered your life as a friend or whatever, surely would not forget all the times you've spent together and the things you've said! This was such a touching poem!!! KEEP WRITING!
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aaww.
This is about no one dude.
but thx so much for the compliments. 
you are funny and all those too. nothing else to say.... I'm speachless. thanks for all the compliments once again.
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