Every year, on her birthday, he gave her another charm
One by one, they joined their kin, encircling her pale arm.
Around her wrist chimed together, kitsch and miniature art
Silver Roses, Golden Dancer and Blue Enamel Heart
To ward off the Evil Eye, every bride wears ‘Something Blue’
But his steady gaze held hers, until all the lies seemed true
Enamel shells are cold and hard, though prettily ideal
Beautiful hopes crashed round her feet, his heart would never feel
Midas’s gift was tempting, to bathe in the glow of gold
But, unlike golden sunlight, that metal’s caress was cold
Tangos hot, not coins bright, make the pulse of true lovers race
Stiff limbs and frozen smiles belied these dancers’ false embrace
Silver pieces bought her soul, trapping her in Hell to rot
No petals need part from flowers to tell he loves her not
Part from his charms, cash in the pain for a trip somewhere new
She found, like Silver Roses, from lies true love never grew
Author notes
When writing this, I didn't know where my inspiration came from. Now, I can't read it without clearly seeing my dear friend, Yellow-Rose http://allpoetry.com/Yellow-Rose
She has been so courageous in her life and love. A true friend and inspiration. I dedicate this to her.
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Your wording was brilliant. There were some
amazing lines that made this poem just leap
off the page. I love your descriptiveness and
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Again, wow. you are a really good poet. I loved this one, she thought he loved her when she got gifts, but then she realized you can't buy love. Awsome.
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A most wonderful sharing this is!
Your wording is truly beautiful and I thank you so much for sharing and for being a part of the contest! -
i really liked this poem. certian lines just sticks out to me. the rhyme just flowed. i wish you good luck in my twin's contest.
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"No petals need part from flowers to tell he loves her not"
That line just sort of stuck out to me. This whole poem was 'darling'. I don't know why I want to use that word but it fits to me. Very emotional poem with great flow and rhyme. Thanks for adding this to my contest! -
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very nice poem and thank you so much for entering.... This was a great poem that held intellgence behind it... I enjoyed reading it a lot... -
now this is absolutely beautiful, and one piece of work i have truly enjoyed on this site the very best of luck on this write
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Congratts on your silvers, they are a lovely pair, crowning this awesome write
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Excellent rhyme and rhythm and a wonderful poem over-all. This reminds me quite a lot of a few pieces I have written along these same lines. Anyway, best of luck in my contest, and thanks for entering this marvelous poem.
M.R.
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Removing... read the rules...
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this is great,
love the take on
charms for a bracelet,
and the rhyming is awesome,
the flow is grand.
Riftkin -
I really love this. the meaning behind it and the rhyming, the flow. its very well done. I really don't even know what to say about it. great work!! Thanks for entering!
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