I am tired
of wearing long sleeve shirts
of hiding who i am
and what i do
I don't know
why I do this
I remember
but I always doubt my memories
I don't want to go through life
Having to cover up my scars
Because you can see them
Both inside and out
I don't want to cry myself to sleep
Because I can't stop thinking
of falling halfway from that tree
near the pretty river where I grew up
Please tell me what you think
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Never worry about what those around you think. If you are comfortable with who you are, then don't worry about trying to cover it up. The scars that can be seen are not as bad as the ones that are inside. A wonderful piece you have written. You're emotions are so powerfully expressed. Keep writing. Loved it.
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I hid my scars for a while, now it dosent matter, i have to many to hide, but the way the worlds pretty messed up people here see it and just ignore what their eyes are showing them.
Ignorance both a blessing and a curse.
What I saw was like looking back some parts, hit home others left blanks but thats becuase its not about me.
And to me this was a powerful statement, you know how to get your feelings across in freeform poetry, well thats what i see.
Never stop writing you got the gift, go with it.
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a honest review of this would be there was no real flow though it did have direction there was no rhythm or rhyme though you expressed yourself perfectly in this it was more of a rant about emotions then a emotional poem please don't take me the wrong way i am only expressing the way i took this piece when it was read through my eyes
Temple~
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agreed with the rant comment.lol, it was just something i had to get off my chest, and of course im not gonna take any offense. i would much rather an honest review than a fake sweet one.
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Well, I suggest you get some sleep and stop being tired of all of those things... change them if you may, but make it the way you feel it should be done.
I enjoyed this piece a lot, as you can tell from my opening paragraph. I enjoyed this because you described the situation very well and I also liked that you worded it well and this also had nice flow.
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Interguing!
Intriguing this poem is to me. I really love that message in the background and infact I posted it onto my yahoo... anyw ays this is a very interesting poem here sis and I really don't quite grasp what you are going for here but then again its 2 am here so youcan not blame me there. anyw ays this is quite a beauty of a poem and yet very well defined. keep up the good work
Bro
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Means i want to be just like a normal teenager, with the only thing that worries me is the wrong colour of lipgloss.lol. sorta. there were parts in it that only a few people will be able to understand.
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i like this poem, i get so tired of things like that too, and all the other shit that goes with things lol
great poem! great job!
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its awsome
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I can't comment on this, you know that. It's a beautiful poem though, such sorrow. I can't stop you, but I'll always support you. Always always.
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Yeah, i really wanted the background though, even though it messes up with my font colours, but its a pretty message on the left.
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