A soldier is told that he must leave
No time to waste asking why
People have no idea how many tears
One shattered heart can cry
“Find strength within the pain my wife
If not for you, then try for me
I don’t want to ask too much of you
But this is my leaving plea”
Sorrow stops the hands of time
Days seem to never end
Tear filled nights plagued with screaming
Until they can embrace again
“Oh, my baby please don’t cry
And please don’t fill your heart with hate
I love you more then life itself
Please promise me you’ll wait…”
Devotion is put to the test
Every second of the day
Cursing the thoughts that creep back in
Clinging to the promise of “I’ll stay”
“My angel, I’m coming back to you
So don’t you shed a tear
Don’t let the nightmares conquer you
For I’m fighting without fear”
Holding onto the final words
And praying they are true
A mind fraying at the seems
Just fighting to get through
“Honey I know it’s hard
But it’s really not that long
Only six months this time
My love, I know that you are strong”
Strength decays with every hour
As tears pound against the floor
Listening to a broken soul screaming
That it cannot take much more
“It’s so good to hear your voice sweetheart
Simply music to my ears
Darling I swear that I am safe
Come now, hush your tears…”
Sleeping right beside the phone
In case that it should ring
But when it’s the sound of another’s voice
The wounds begin to sting
“My angel I hope that you’re ok
Please promise me you’ll try
But my time on here is running out
I love you so much…goodbye…”
*~Abigail~*
Author notes
Age: 18
Option: 4
well this was inspired because..A. I married a soldier and B. The last episode of Army Wives made me sad..so yea
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This is so touching and powerful...and I definitely love how every other stanza is the husband speaking. My favorite line was "strength decays with every hour"...it's just an awesome line...well, awesome job. Good luck in the contest and thanks for entering!
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I love this poem, my boyfriend was in the army and wow, that is hard... It really is, I know. Thank you for your very powerful write and good luck in my contest.
~Maria -
Beautiful work here and I love how you
put this one together. A lot of emotions
and imagery in this. Thanks a lot for
your entry in my contest and keep up the
wonderful work here! Good luck to you with it!
Jeremy0826 -
left me speachless. i loved it all but my favourite verse was, "Sorrow stops the hands of time
Days seem to never end
Tear filled nights plagued with screaming
Until they can embrace again" its so sad that these things do actually happen and your poem was a very powerful interpretation.
thank you for entering and the best of luck -
Nicely written, it's sad that we are put in a position to have this kind of thing go on in this day and age. Bless you and yours....Scott
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I thought it had good cadence in the rhyming, without over-doing it except in the end of the second verse. I feel you could work on the rhyming, mainly in the last line, it's a tad weaker than the rest.
A good poem that you have written here.
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wow this is good. You put into words what every soldier and spouse feels even it they don't say it. I know been there done that.
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Wow this is amazing. *hugs* it made me really really sad. but you did a great job. Keep writing.
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