Me in the corner,
a photograph in my mind.
You in the front smiling,
but you see your eyes aren't.
I remember everyday you smiled,
not those fake ones like the photo.
Real, happy eyes looking at me,
glad to see me and my face.
Now I look into your eyes,
their shade changed due to you.
Your new persona is frightening,
a shadow of what I saw before.
I want to tear up this memory,
but I would have a job to do.
So many bad memories,
but not enough time to burn them.
You seem to see me the same way,
a broken memory we want to get rid of.
But don't you kinda wish it didn't happen,
so we could look at each other again?
I do,
and I wish you were where you once were.
My friend right at my side,
the person always helping me out.
I miss you,
I felt like we could figure this out.
I almost see your old smile again,
the color in your eyes changing for better.
I see you and I almost see it,
the person I once knew.
I can feel warmth in my heart,
and I almost forget what I said before.
You're the memory I never want to forget...
Author notes
This is a real emotion I feel right now. Don't tell me you don't feel it, cause I feel it all around me. This is real, and I want it to disappear.
By the way, this is about how I have felt when some of my bf's left me. And the worst reason is cause most of them left me because there friends told lies about me. I hate it...
But the most recent feeling of this is because of a fight with a friend. I think everyone is going to hate me cause of it and I really want us to work it out. I know this won't end the way I want it to, but can't I have some hope without her crushing it down??
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"I want to tare up this memory," - "tare" would be "tear".
"I fell like we could figure this out." - "fell" I believe that you mean "felt".
In your last line of the poem "Your" would be "You're".
A poem on reminiscing. A nice poem that you have written here.
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Well this is a very good poem. But I fail to see how it fits in with the theme of the contest. The contest is about sensuality, not broken friendships or relationships gona awry. Albeit a very good poem, it just doesn't fit in with what I've asked for. Thank you for the effort
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there is always hope. Have you heard the song on the radio like this. it is great. It is called "Better Than Me." I think. Some things have no good explanations but i do hope that you and your friend made up. Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest.
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OH YEAH I HEAR YOU ON THIS I REALLY REALLY LOVE THIS IT FITS ME RIGHTNOW AND IT SOUNDED LIKE A POEM THAT I WANTED TO WRITE BUT COULDNT FIND THE WORDS I REALLY LOVE THIS YEAH THERE ARE SOOOO MANY MEMORIES ID LIKE TO TEAR UP AND ITS TRUE I NEVER DO WANT TO FORGET BUT I REALLY LOVE THIS WOW
GOOD LUCK IN THE CONTEST
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wow this was amazing
it really could be felt and it just made me feel
like wow
it was so emotional
well done and best of luck
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