this was an accident
i didnt mean to fall so hard
the blame isnt on me
your accountable for my stomach
theres butterflies in there
dont you know?
the sensation is quite odd
what did you do
to make me see
only you
like you're this sort of god
your so perfect
at least in my eyes
seeing a shooting star at night
i wish for you
funny how time changes nothing
you've been my wish for so long
but i guess not seeing you
makes me forget
those wonderfully awful feelings
but two minutes
just that it takes
for me to fall flat on my face
i'm not denying this any more
im never gonna get over you
A contest entry
- Who Do You Love? (I WARN YOU... IT'S EXTREMELY CHALLENGING!) by Cherokee.
750 points, ended September 15, 2007, 22 entries
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Comments
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excellent expression
A lot of times, falling so hard, is something we just can't help. You create some great emotions in this poem. The butterflies, wishing on that star, and the best one is:
"but two minutes
just that it takes
for me to fall flat on my face
i'm not denying this any more
im never gonna get over you"
Good luck in the contest!
Ethereal One
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='[ Amber I am in this very spot right now, amazing write, good luck in the contest.
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two minutes
just that it takes
for me to fall flat on my face
hahaha, that part made me laugh... i like this one ^-^
check your 'your's though... some of em should be you're
anways.. good write!! -
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