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An Anniversary, Quite Contrary






An Anniversary, Quite Contrary




All my flowers have died
                   dried petals piling by my toes


silver bells have rusted
                       cockle shells are dusted


and my pretty maids?

they have abandoned their rows...


as the decrepit, bony hand of pain

covers my mouth-
                   stifling my sorrowful cries

part of me dies                        again



My entire garden has died
                        in the ravenous mouth
                                   of September's approach

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September approaches, and the nightmares get worse. September holds a very bad anniversary. Someone wake me when it ends.

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  • Eusebius
    March 26

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    Dark and so darkly mysterious! (as Lovecraft says, some things are better left unknown!) Powerfully and most potently done poetry here! bravo... bravo... bravo...


  • Blue Rew silver member
    September 19, 2007

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    I like the darkness here...
    adjectives like thorns entwine with
    these visions of torment at memories
    that came but never went...all upon
    a September wind. Blue


    • SerenityNChains
      September 20, 2007
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      Thank you so much blue for the kind and encoyuraging comment. I do so appreciate it hun, especially on this write.

      Blessed be,
      Billie Jean

  • Fallen forever silver member
    September 2, 2007

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    this is like nothing i have ever read before

    i wish you could be locked up in a castle like sleeping beauty and wake up when it's over and carry on being beautiful

    this is fantastic, you used the nursery rhyme perfectly and worked around it amazingly
    to encase memories, emotion and the link between gardening and seasons

    well done, this is amazing

    all my love and hugs


  • A u r i e l l e
    August 30, 2007

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    short

    in the ravenous mouth of September's approach very creative

    This poem sounds like a masterpeice. It sounds like it can be remembered by that line

    "all my flowers have died"

  • PerfectImperfection
    August 27, 2007

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    Oh sweetie, this one gave me chills. Your pain is screaming from the lines.... This is so very well expressed, poignant and intensely raw - but so beautifully sad. My thoughts are always with you & if you EVER need me i shall be here. I love you!!!!


    • SerenityNChains
      August 27, 2007

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      Thank you hun. This has been a bad time of year for me for a long time. Anniversaries should be good right? This one is hell. Thank you for being there for me. I am truly blessed to have your friendship.
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