in a dance of tongue and mouth
and hands, in creases and shapes
that only the body can read
we fold each other,
then fold again
over
and over
till from the flat sheet of the bed
the petals of a flower begin
to stir,
and bursts
itself open in a straight-rising sigh
that scatters all the seeds
of inhibition
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A contest entry
- Sensual, Sensual, Sensual... by Bedroom Eyes.
525 points, ended August 26, 2007, 8 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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if you keep writing poems like this
with such words as "bursts" isolated like that...
you're going to make all of the pelvic muscles of every woman on AP cringe.
my oh my what a creative twist in this one. We find ourselves in that moment, on those sheets... perhaps even to reflect on such bursts...
yikes!
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LOL... thanks Kim... yes perhaps I shouldn't write it - for the sanity of my own pelvic muscles too, lololol
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Wow- this was stellar.
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Great poem.Especially liked the lines "we fold
each other,then fold again over and over".
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Wonderful poem penned....Worthy of the silver!
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Yes, and beautifully, done with such deep and dear sensuality...
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Wow... gorgeous... I wish I could cry... beautiful!! Amazing you are, I'm wondering why I never noticed these beauties before!
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you write about love at least as violently as i do, yet you dress your love in so many layers of velvet that only the keen observer guesses at the abysmal depths it penetrates before it allows itself to rage. incredibly beautiful
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I read the softness of a kiss given inside these words, so perfectly placed. Wonderfully done!!!!!!!!
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Your friend Miss2u recomended your poetry, and I'm glad I'm here. Wow. (now I don't know what to say)This is so amazing. I love the part where the rose petals appear. That comparation and the seeds and everything.. Ahh this is so beautiful!
Maria xxxxxxxx
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I can see the gentle tissue like folded flowers of your heart blooming in this write. So tender and surreal they steal the definition of "beautiful" from every dictionary II can think of. Simply wonderful.
Blessed be,
Billie Jean
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Beautiful write, the imagery is amazing.
"In a dance of tongue and mouth and hands" What a beautiful line and a great beginning to the wonderful words that follow
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Came back to read. Lovely poem.
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"we fold each other" beautiful...
wow love the imagery. Hmm the folded paper and the floer...
beautiful. The flower does shimmer the folder white paper...almost like a love card or like two lover son the bed in the middle... nice thoughts -
these words proof that the folding of paper, ... can become something very beautiful and VERY erotic. tastefully and wonderfully done
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yes it was beautiful... thanks bb
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This is gorgeous Nicolette!
You always write into the heart of hearts.
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Thank you, Zayra
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this must be a soft edged Origami, more like velvet folds than paper.
Oh so nice
erotic with a woman's fine attentions
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Human origami with two lovers? I really love that idea. You always know how to write about love in very surprising ways. You make me go like, that makes perfect sense but I would have never thought of it. And this one I like even better, I like the idea that love is a fine art, and the flower really is a great metaphor, and very eloquent with the origami theme.
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Thank you, Diana - you always make me look good, lol. I wrote this one in about an hour...I'm not quite satisfied with it..but I'm glad you liked it
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You look good without me making you look good I know how that goes. Just wrote a poem in over an hour this morning myself, and it seems the more time we spend editing something, the more we see bad things to change. But maybe in time you'll be satisfied with this as it is. I love it
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Nice work indeed
David
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ahhh yes.... i have an origami one somewhere from a while ago... we do bend and fold .... yes we do
this is slick and folded neatly into sensuality Nic... yes it is
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beautiful ending... you write the
most tasteful & subtly sensual poetry that I have ever had the pleasure of reading... that final stanza is a wonderful closing and I love love LOVE the likening to origami!
beautiful!
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Nicolette, I don't think I've ever read anything as sensually pretty as this. The description is softly exhilarating and the last lines make me visualize dandelions bursting on a late summer wind. Sort of makes you want to plant a whole garden, nes pas? Such a lovely poem! ~ Karen
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Hmmm planting a whole garden...now that is quite a thought, Karen.. thank you, my friend
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When we are young it is easy to move and perform such gymnast like shapes - as one gets older we lose that flexibility and even though making love is still as pleasing, it is not so mobile as it once was. LOL Brought back some memories here of earlier times when we were both much younger. Congrats on taking silver - a most worthy recipient. Only have 2 left to give -
too.
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OK, you're really messing with my head Nicolette. Now I think "origami, I wonder what metaphor she's going to use for Japanese paper ornaments," only to discover this is the now infamous "Sensual Spot - Reserved" poem under a new title and already sporting a shiny silver trophy.
I tell you, there's a reason we men can never figure women out. When it's "Sensual Spot - Reserved," there's no writing for us G-spot enthusiasts, and when it's about paper treats, suddenly there's a WEALTH of sensuality. The good news is that like just about any guy, it doesn't matter whether you say "Sensual "Spot" or "paper!", either way if its spoken by a woman I tend to think "hmmm. Sex?"
So, I am delighted now to be able to associate origami with one of my favorite topics. I mean, as your poem suggests, with all those bends and folds, not to mention a touch of artistic flair, "origami" ALWAYS should have held such wonderful thoughts. It's just that whenever I tried origami in my youth, I was all thumbs and hell, THAT's not how I want to think of sex....
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LOL, Monte... you know we have a saying in Afrikaans "papier is geduldig" which means 'paper is patient'..perhaps that is why you weren't that successful with origami in your youth! Thanks for the smiles placed here on this page
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"papier is geduldig"??! I have to tell you Nicolette, that sounds suspiciously like "paper is gelding" to me, and even if I was all thumbs in my youth, I KNOW I'd rather be all thumbs as opposed to a gelding in my adulthood.
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You have a lot of origami shapes hidden iside your pen and heart. Soft, sensual and... Simply, beautiful. The Art with big A
~Sonja~
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Talking about perfect sensuality here
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wow...
Wonderful... and a very worthy trophy winner! The amazing imagery you evoked in this very cleverly written poem will stay with me for a long time!
Great!
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the image of the growth of sensual climax is beautiful. stunning write, no doubt of the talent.
-shirley
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wonderful, a page seems to be folded over and again until a sigh, so very well done here...caring and passion...PK
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excellent
this is a wonderful piece
leaving me with images of two becoming one
and then there's the metaphor
I love reading rich poetry
the kind that almost reads itself
congrats on not only the award, but to hold so many in awe
peace and hugs
Muddy
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Wanda is right, there's somethin' in the air tonight.
Sensuality
Sensuality
Sensuality
...Sigh!
Wonderfully Sensual, Scribe.
~ Nicholas
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you hoo!
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Such power and movement in this piece Nicolette. I could see the flowers of the bed sheet rising and bursting in amazing sensuality. Wonderfully written my friend.
~Lyrical
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oh, my. Now I see why Wanda was handing me smelling salts..lol..
wow.
it's all I can say.
Such beautiful imagery..
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Well your petals do stir a sence of wonder, African pearl of enchanting rituals...beautiful piece
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"till from the flat sheet of the bed
the petals of a flower begin
to stir"
I just wrote a poem after reading this, Muddy's & Rowan's. I seriously considered titling it "Damn You All". 
Holy smokes. Good luck in the contest, Sweetie. Vlindertjie
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Hummm I love origamy nice and lovely. But isn't it fold and unfold. Else we might get so crinckly.
Wim you
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Well...I must say that this piece is outstandingly done. I have read some REALLY good poems in this contest, and this one stands among the best. I can literally find no fault whatsoever in this.
It's original, refreshing, and VERY sensual. A true masterpiece of poetry
Well done Poet!
Bst of luck!
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oh gorgeous!
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What elegance...What Purity...What a exquisite penning, dear one. So tastefully sensual, the beauty of making love revealed so silken....like georgette curtains caressing the cool night air... "...itself open in a straight-rising sigh that scatters all the seeds of inhibition...." These lines are beyond perfection, Nic. This poem is beyond perfection! It takes the reader from anticipation to pinnacle with such beauty and grace... I have no words to describe what I 'see' and 'feel' in your words. Absolutely Gorgeous!! A dozen roses at your feet, Sweet Lady, for this outstanding offering!
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Just beautiful, this is such a heavenly sigh of a flower, an uncovering of inhibitions that has waited so long to blossom...you are the queen of sensuality....I have yet to write anything remotely close to where you can take your readers...I admire your work so much You truly are one of my favorite writers here
This is so brilliant, so stunning!
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Such an elegant piece of sensuality that rises above and beyond, raising a new bar to meet for the rest of us. Softness has new meaning within your words. Best of luck to you!
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the clock is ticking *tick tock, tick tock*
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sensual spot reserved
a lovely comment deserved,
but i guess i should wait
if only to prove that fate
rewards the the patient hand...PK
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Well now, I HAD to click on a poem called "Sensual Spot: Reserved," because I am Monte. And Monte thinks like a lot of men -- meaning, I click before I think when I see "sensual spot," because I am definitely think "G-Spot Poem!!!" ... Which is to say, now realizing I am more a guy than someone who can read, I am staring at a bunch of white, and now realizing "oh, that's what is meant by 'reserved.'" Damn....
Oh well, here's some applause just out of principal. Because even if no other words are written, you know I like the title.
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LOL...you men can't wait lololol!! I had to pick an alluring title as the poem itself might not live up to it. But thanks, Monte...at least now you know what "reserved" means!!
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