Lost & Found

I'm lost

somewhere in the construction

of voids and their bridges.

You're lost

in a world beyond my reach.

We're lost

in words we refuse to speak,

in thoughts we refuse to think.

And Raazi

is found

dead in a corner...breathing one last tear..

shedding one last breath.

Please tell me what you think

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abu nuwas
July 9, 2009

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Hmmmm
First impression: a bit precious
Second thoughts: A bit harsh, and rather pompous.
Overall: Quite pretty and delicate, but somehow light-weight. But at least the writer can bloody-well spell, punctuate etc!
Bride Of Hate
January 6, 2009

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This is beautiful in it's simplicity. I love the switch from 'you' to 'me' to 'us' to 'I' in third person. Very captivating.
Venugopal
April 6, 2008

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We are lost in mire! how true. Can I intervene here, we are lost in words we speak, in activities we indulge. The other way of looking. A nice poem indeed.
Manicmuze
March 9, 2008

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those first two stanza's really captivated me.
sad, painful and very expressive.
i really enjoyed the read, nicely done.
~ wendy
Sf
January 30, 2008
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A Fantastic Piece!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
DarkChildsKiss
December 30, 2007

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dead in a corner...breathing one last tear..
shedding one last breath.
WOW! That is a powerful and unique saying. It is very creative. Great write!
LoveInTheWind
December 18, 2007
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wow
this is really powerful.
nicely written.
rite
October 27, 2007

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When we stand at the cross roads of utter despair and total annihilation, some idiot once said, let us have the wisdom to make the right choice. I guess these days not many are left. Yet still we live privileged lives, compared to others less fortunate than we are. I enjoyed reading your profound pondering, expressed in a most poetical form. Thank you for creating and sharing. Take care,

U
Susan John Francis
September 28, 2007

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Yes We All are lost
In words we refuse to speak,
In thoughts we refuse to think,
and some one precious in lost in the mean time.
I wish u a better day for sharing this ,,,,,,,,,,
stormynights
August 26, 2007
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I love this, few words but so very much said. The first stanza pulled me right in. Very well done.
Danneh
August 26, 2007

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I think that we all feel this way at times.. Like we are lost and by the time we are found that someone is going to be dead, that we aren't worthy.. Good enough..

Beautiful write sweetie..
-Danneh<2