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A kiss

 

 

give me the smile that will melt my heart

and those tender kisses that taste like fine art.

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Show me the passion only your eyes can hold

a look of "Forever love" this heart will behold.

Take my hand surrendering to its fingertips

as they slide across your wet sensuous lips.

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Caress me gentley and very slowly my love

with a magical touch thats so undreamed of.

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I'll sail away with you till the morning light

for just one more k                                               

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s    

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                                                      that makes it allright.

                                                                                      

 

Author notes

I felt a kiss is the most sensuous thing we do,

so it warranted the write for this.

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  • xxAshleyNicolexx
    September 2, 2007
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    wow, very powerful but it a good way i reallt loved this write keep up the great work!!!!


  • Asdzaa Nadleehe
    August 28, 2007

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    A sensual kiss from near parted lips..sighs..
    I adore this write..So very beautiful..
    And yes kissing is the most sensuous things we can do..
    Best wishes with this entry...
    Peace
    ~A~


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    August 27, 2007

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    you know i have heard that some where, but i think this is the personifcation of that, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest, i think i used that word right


  • ebaby
    August 26, 2007
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    My husband told me that he would be at the shore waiting for me beside his sail boat, before he died... Today would have been his birthday 8/26
    Your poem made me bring up the thoughts of what he said, and Ill take this poem as a kiss from him......... great write, I love it!


  • Bedroom Eyes
    August 26, 2007
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    I agree with your author's comment...a kiss IS one of the most sensual things we do

    Nice rhyme & scheme, and I like the kiss stretching to the final line

    Nice job Poet!

    Best of luck!


  • poet2angels gold member
    August 26, 2007
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    lovely with flawless rhyme and flow...So beautiful as always...

    Lynda


  • Bedroom Eyes
    August 26, 2007

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    This piece is two lines short of 10...but I will allow you time to make corrections, then I will do a real comment


  • grannyeri gold member
    August 26, 2007

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    Lovely verse, great rhythm and rhyme, sensual for sure. Gently, alright (sp). Liked the flow and the wonderful images these lines bring to mind. Good luck in the contest,

  • Whispering Wind gold member
    August 26, 2007

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    Slow and sensual, filled with sweet need...sigh...This is just wonderful my brother...my my how you can write these sweet love poemsGood luck in the contest


  • Celticmoon
    August 26, 2007

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    Oh wow! Gary you really know how to turn up the sweet heat, don't ya? Lovely hun simplt lovely! Best of luck to you

    Your
    Georgia Peach

  • Celticmoon
    August 26, 2007
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