I'M TIRED, TIRED of being in constant pain
Of listening to months of endless rain,
Of rarely venturing outside through health,
Then when I do
Of people that hurt and judge of you...
Of what they cant see is wrong with you.
I'M TIRED!
I'M TIRED, TIRED of munching doctors pills,
Of rehab units and doctors queues,
Of morphine patches and oramorph
Xrays too
Of spine pinned together
Of sciatica and damp/wet weather
I'M TIRED!!!
anaisnais (C)
Author notes
I wrote this to help people see how judgemental they can be our bodies work from the inside out. Please don't categorise people tor their health their lives can be restricted enough they are still human beings and it doesn't necessarily mean their minds have gone. Talk to the person not the person with or behind them!
Sorry. Gripe over!!
A contest entry
- A contest for the masses by Danneh.
600 points, ended October 4, 2007, 34 entries
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actually AM ihad sciatica 2 years ago horrible you cant sit or lie ..i relate to this xx well done
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i like it
you laid it out
i got it ..
and agreed without requiring my sympathy flowing easily turning words into empathy . i liked it just fine . -
I just love the message in this poem!!Stop being judgmental of the pain of others..they all ready suffer enough...talk to the person not at them...and love them know matter what
...EXCELLENT!!!...BRAVO!!!...
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A great piece o f Work
This is really very good. I love the rhyme in this and the flow is superb. Wonderful writing. I can feel your tiredness coming through in this. Love the imagery as well. Keep writing you are good.
All the best
Wayne
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Thanks for your reply, most grateful.
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i know exactly what you are going thru!!! well spoken.
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People do tend to be very judgmental. I get weary of it as well, but I try not to let it get to me. Donno, some days are easier than others, really, but we get up ..and we keep going.
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yes.... although our bodies are very effiecient, they need a break too! nicely vapture the emotions of how the body would feel. bravo!
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It amazes my how many things can go wrong with these stupid bodies of ours.
Your poem reminds me of the line from the Anastasia song - I'm sick and tired of always being sick and tired. -
I'm tired of it too honey
Tired of sleepless nights
and threats of being put away
Of slipping pills between my lips
and hoping I'll get to slip -into my own darkness-
And I'll wear it like it's in style
this fashion of makebelieve roses and
-those blood stains that just wont come off-
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Sleeping pills, god I love them
What the heck would I do without them
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You are certainly right in what you say in your author comments. How often we talk to the caregiver instead of the patient, thinking they are unable to think for themeselves. We prejudge people by their appearance which is not good. What's inside is very important, really more so that what is outside; although that can cause some problems in the work force, depending on the job. Liked the brevity of the lines anad the message shared here.
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Good luck in the contest! I really like this poem, its so honest and tense and frankly pissed off in attitude, and too right as well. Its a very strong message! and the repetition works quite well.
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This is good, I like this
I have a card for traveling, for special places to park. a lady said to me you know people shouldn't take a place needed by another. When they look well and do so well. I said can you tell if they have heart trouble, breathing problems, or anything else// i remembered the lady after a few moments I had passed heafter comming in the building. You are right. If you can't see the problem be bold and ask. I often will tell them I think I am dooing great after 200 surgerys so you think??? mac
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I truely feel your pain nad tiredness and i understand it. This is a very good write. Goodluck in the contest
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Excellent
an excellent way to get out the "bitch".. that is what I find... I write to get out my emotions.. keeps me in BALANCE.. and if you read my profile.. LIFE IS A BALANCE...yes.. you are right.. so often we forget we are talking to a real person.. one that at one time in their life was vibrant.. and vital to society.. not that they can't be anymore.. people just treat them that way.. I work in a long term care facility.. and the amazing people I have met over the years.. Yes I wholeheartedly agree with you...welcome to the site.. and hope to read more of your writes...
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Sadly we live in a world where unless you are young healthy and good looking You are likely to be treated as some sort of freak.My body has age to it and has deteriorated over the years.Pain has been a companion for as long as i can remember.I do not mind I am happy with my life and the pain lets me know that i am alive.
Who could ask for more. I can understand where this poem comes from . And you have expressed such feeling extremely well. A pleasure to have read
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