i walk around an i can't feel
a thing
i wander around the school
they can't see me
i'm getting worried
why am i being ignored??
my friends are crying
i wonder what happened
i try to comforted them
but they move out of the way
i'm getting scared
i walk home and i see posters
about some missing kid
she looks familiar
but i just walk by
not knowing
.......
i go home and there's alot of cars
in the front yard
i walk in
i see my mom crying
dad standing there
my brothers in shock
by now im yelling
"what happen!!! tell me right now!!!"
just then i see the police
holding my dead body
wrists slit and dried blood on them
i think im dead
and i just don't care enough
Author notes
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A contest entry
- [Happiness is a warm gun] by whiterabbit..
375 points, ended September 18, 2007, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Unholy by ILikeChocolateMilk.
600 points, ended September 28, 2007, 12 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - For Poets With 3 Trophys Or Less- Prewrites Allowed by Mercury Rising.
450 points, ended October 11, 2007, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - *Let me occupy your mind* [As you do mine] by x dont.cry.out x.
400 points, ended December 19, 2007, 27 entries
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Comments
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Very dark and different and a tad disturbing as well.This is really an excellent poem. Best of luck in my contest, and thanks for entering.
Mercury Rising
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This was a really good poem it was very dark or to me it was keep up the good work
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Good job on this. It is well written and the way you write the beginning makes people want to know what is going on. It's really good.
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oooh, this was different from what I usually read. I really like it. The last two lines just finish off the tone of the whole piece. Great job.
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