It’s not her face that needs the balm
of anti-aging crème;
Olay, you must admit you're wrong
to older beauty queens.
The wisdom found around her eyes,
reflects she’s weathered storms,
It’s wrinkles found within her mind
that need so much reform.
She’ll not return to youthful days,
when glance was all it took
To catch the eye of passerbys,
entice with trap or hook.
For now she must wear confidence
and that’s no easy cure,
That ghost of time took up new space,
moved in as she matured.
A mirror serves to only shock
what will not go away;
What she needs now is sweet & kind,
from those she greets each day.
This remedy will soothe and calm,
from mind lift all insults.
So now she’ll know it’s not the crème
that brings the best results ...
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Author notes
Disjointed by aging ...
A contest entry
- Her Former Self by Pamela A Lamppa.
5000 points, ended September 9, 2007, 13 entries
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your poems flow effortlessly,
what a wise lesson for all to learn!!
really like this one!!
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You have a wonderful way with words, and I love the message, I, too am so sick of being defined by commercial society as though we all must fit into a certain mold. You might enjoy this on a similar subject. http://allpoetry.com/poem/4196187
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Lovely Lesson -- Good Writing
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LOL too true too true too true. Oh I did love this a great deal. Such a different take on this prompt. Wonderfully done that left me to smile a bit of magic as I peered my own little laugh lines...ahem.
Couple of things:
Olay, you must admit your wrong - "your" should be "you're"
To catch the eye of passer bys - "passer bys" should be "passerbys"
from mind lift all insults,. remove the comma.
These simple corrections can be made easily and what a gem you'll have here.
I loved this piece. Hit home in oh so many ways, as I stand, busily trying to unwrinkle those wrinkles in my mind. Not as easy as one might think... Well done. Thank you so much for entering this gem into my contest. ~Pamela
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It's not the wrinkles and gray hair that distress me about getting old. It's that insidious 'furniture disease'... where your chest slides down into your drawers...lol. This was just pure delight to read this morning. Good luck in the contest.
Sincerely,
Leo Long
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O Tempora O Mores
Telomere antioxydant rejuvenation is not unfortunately available on demand though this may change with extracts from nursing bees (which live ten times long as workers)
perhaps the last verse
This remedy will soothe and calm,
her mind of all insults.
So now she’ll know it’s not the crème
that brings the best results ...
This remedy will soothe and calm,
from mind lift all insults,
so she may know it’s not the crème
that brings the best results ...
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I completely agree with what you wrote. You dont need anti aging creme for those wrinkles, it should be whats inside that really counts. This speaks the truth and made me laugh a bit too when you mentioned Olay.
Very good
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