Time passes on as days go by,
Oblivious and anxious at the same time,
Feelings whirling and tumbling,
Watching my heart soar so high...
How the darkness hides my tears
as I quietly begin to cry
the love I feel for you
is now falling from my eyes
I wait
to feel your hand in mine
to touch your face
to sit warmly wrapped
in your arms...
To share the stars
Like a thief in the night
unexpectedly you robbed me
Stole my heart without a peep
I thank you for being so silent
My heart you shall have and forever keep
Please tell me what you think
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Absolutely lovely. Your rhyme and flow have a very serene, lyrical feel to them. Every emotion just pours out of this like the tears you speak of. I love the lines "The love I feel for you is now falling from my eyes" What a wonderful way to describe the crying and the emotion. Well done! Good luck in the contest!
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Beautifully Written!
This is beautifully sad. When your heart is filled with so much love for that special person in your life that it begins to overflow from your eyes, life can be very difficult. Especially when he or she is so far from you. You can only hope for the best and that in time you will be together again.
I love these lines:
"Like a thief in the night
unexpectedly you robbed me
Stole my heart without a peep
I thank you for being so silent
My heart you shall have and forever keep"
Another beautiful piece by you! Thanks a lot for sharing this one with me and keep up the wonderful work here!
Jeremy0826
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the love I feel for you
is now falling from my eyes
Like a thief in the night
unexpectedly you robbed me
Stole my heart without a peep
I thank you for being so silent
My heart you shall have and forever keep
I love these lines. I can't even lie. But anyways, I liked this poem, I thought it was kinda sad at first, but hen again now that I think about it, I didn't reall get the beginning. But hopefully you'll help me wit that
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This is a touching write very very beautiful with lovely meter well done poet!
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How the darkness hides my tears
as I quietly begin to cry
the love I feel for you
is now falling from my eyes
Such writing, you certainly know how to achieve getting one to feel your poems...a gift indeed. This was beautifully penned.
~Rain
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Wonderful Writing
Beautiful writing here. Deep and meaningful. It flowed very very well indeed. Beautiful emotions in this as well.
Well done
All the best
Wayne
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aaaaggghhhh. I like this its rather sweet and gentle in context. Want to cry. If you have chance please take time to read mine I'm new to this and want to hear opinions if you've time. Keep writing! Kindest regards.
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I think this is brilliant. I'm new to this and no expert, but feel you've got real tallent here. Keep up the good work!!!!
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wow you have so much feeling in that I am 10
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