White ants devour timbers of compassionate forests
supremacy survival; society slowly sinks,
eaten homes subside into gardens of decay.
Dans mon jardin de fruit
la vie continue,
et l’espoir a disparu.
A contest entry
- Le Jardin Fruitier by ea.
500 points, ended September 10, 2007, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Lovely.
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Excellent
Very nicely done. I enjoyed this a great deal. Just superb!
~Pamela 
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a good use of alliteration here, aye if we tske our eyes off the ball in life then nature will quickly put us back amongst the leaves on the ground.
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Wonderful Write!!!
Wow!!! This is amazing. The title was really simple yet captivating (always of great importance). Your poem also flowed really well. You have expressed yourself in the best way possible.
I really enjoyed reading your poem and thanks for sharing with us.
Would you mind reading one of my poems http://allpoetry.com/poem/show/3342726 (somehow it’s special for me) I would appreciate your comments.
~Vernal Bloom~
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Great metaphor and message in this poem. Good luck in the contest!
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