dancing on shadows,
dreaming of color,
circling serenade
of candlewick wonder
butter-melt nights,
silk-shroud slinking
into cool crescent of moon-sallow
flicker of quick remindings
you are here
and I follow your lead
in waltz, with difference,
I hold air
of candlewick wonder,
circling serenade,
dreaming of color
dancing on shadows
Author notes
option "Write about candle light it's beauty, how it makes you feel....."
In a list
A contest entry
- FREE VERSE, OTHER OPTIONS. by AngelicMistress.
1000 points, ended August 27, 2007, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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"butter-melt nights,
silk-shroud slinking
into cool crescent of moon-sallow
flicker of quick remindings"
You are a torch of tenderness, my Sister. Such a wonderful description, Sweetie. Good luck in the contest, my Friend. 
Wanda
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ty, dear heart..you should recognize such, for you are a candlewick wonder too.
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What a memorable poem! Sheer genius!
Enfolded within the top and bottom where the lines mirror each other, held secure within the radius of candle light, a nucleus of memories after summer-heat and cool night, still dances. . . but alone. Closed in realization of its silence, but remembered still, inspired as it was, by candle light.
This is a perfect poem, multilayered, in a form that encloses the circle of candle light and within that, the unspoken memories that, though hidden there, are gone. It shows that all memory concerns what is not here, now. Thoughtful, I sit in awe of its multilevel truths!
Terry -
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ty so much dee....what a nice comment. I did work hard on this one; changed and changed and then went back to how I wrote it first.
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YOU HAVE DONE A GREAT JOB WITH THIS PIECE, POET
GOOD LUCK IN THE CONTEST, AND THANK YOU FOR ENTERING IN SAME.
TANYA -
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ty so much tanya
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Impeccable
the candle lit in dreams
that burns into my sleep
will always burn to keep
love from others word-beams
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ty again.
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I felt like a candle flame reading this...such a dance of light and father...just wonderful
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I know the backgroudn is busy, but so perfect for this poem.
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