Glass walls…
I am looking
at the world through
glass walls.
Bullet proof,
shatter proof,
nothing can break
them down.
I built these cold
indestructible walls;
they are of my own making,
they contain me,
my kicking and screaming
self that wishes to get out.
She is there inside of me,
testing my strength, waiting
for the walls to break, shatter
into nothingness.
Am I strong enough?
Can I withstand her constant pounding
against my soul?
Only time will tell…
A contest entry
- A contest for the masses by Danneh.
600 points, ended October 4, 2007, 34 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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the internal conflict is well documented here. easy to form a visual with your words. like how you express your doubt in honesty. whereas you tell us its walls of your own makin..shatterproof...you later recognize a fear that just as you built, from the inside you could also possibly destroy it and shatter what you had made shatterless. interesting.
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Hmmm...that makes ya think...
I like poems that get inside and shake some thing loose! Well done, hun! WW
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You did a nice job on this piece, I thank you alot for doing a piece instead of pre writes. While I don't mind them, it does annoy me.
I feel like this sometimes.. Like the walls I build aren't strong enough to keep me in, even though I thought them indestrucatble. And am I sure I don't want me out?
=o Just found out who you were (their evil! They won't tell me who entered) Great job girlie.
-Danneh<3
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hrm this contest i can slighty relate to good job on this piece. good showing of emotions also. i wish you the best of luck in the contest
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