Soon after early morning’s dew appears
They fly upon the breeze, just like a mist,
Translucent, tiny, gossamer thin tears,
A chancy touch... you, sentimentalist.
My fingers hold a tuft of soft, green grass,
I touch to lips the freshness of the day,
Of air the clarity of crystal glass,
Of blades reflecting gold inside a ray.
My thoughts are far, despite these magic scenes,
Subdued are senses, eyes, and aching heart,
Dawn comes, the pretty queen of tangerines,
This most enchanting gift of nature’s art.
I call to you, just listen to my sighs,
The lark, my herald, seeds with them the skies.
Author notes
OPTION 1 - In regards to the picture as a prompt.
In a list
A contest entry
- FREE VERSE, OTHER OPTIONS. by AngelicMistress.
1000 points, ended August 27, 2007, 18 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Beautiful!
This is exceptionally beautiful! Thank you so, very much! The imagery is INCREDIBLE! I love these lines!
"My thoughts are far, despite these magic scenes,
Subdued are senses, eyes, and aching heart,
Dawn comes, the pretty queen of tangerines,
This most enchanting gift of nature’s art."
Again thank you! Best of Luck!
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This is the first sonnet I have read from you...I love this, I LOVE sonnets...and this is beautiful, a sigh of sadness, especially in the first stanza, it's amazing what beauty we miss in nature, out surroundings, or notice or how it is affected by our feelings. Congrats on the gold
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Lovely imagery and strong metaphors, I like "queen of tangerines" very much. This free style of yours has great meter and rhyme. Congratulations for the gold.
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OUTSTANDING
YOU HAVE DONE A GREAT JOB WITH THIS PIECE, POET
GOOD LUCK IN THE CONTEST, AND THANK YOU FOR ENTERING IN SAME.
TANYA
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"Translucent, tiny, gossamer thin tears,
A chancy touch... you, sentimentalist."
Resplendent, simply resplendent, quite an enviable heart's labor dear poet, what an endearing voice too. Well done.
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This reads like a song... a sigh...and the rhyming falls so gently on the ears! I haven't read many of your rhyming poems but this one is truly beautiful and displays your poetic talents so very well. You may write sighs, you may - beautiful.
~ Nicolette
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Thank you dear for your always great friendly and poetical support. It means a lot to me while trying to paint my world with words.
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