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Transient Loyalties Under a Supernovaeic Sun

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Last thoughts of a mostly-robotic cyborg, on a planet, knowing that the central star is about to go nova...

 

 

 

 

 

I stroke her beauty, waiting unwillingly in a weary unhappiness,

paused in time, in anticipation of the impending gamma ray outburst and vaporizing heat...

 

My hand finds hers in an attempt to console.

My hand- such a biomechanical wonder, yet it is in debt to just such supernovae outbursts,

the millions of degrees of heat energy melding atoms into the heaviest of elements

that made possible such technologies as I, as her... 

 

We leave our corporate biomech-steeds in nucleic discontent as the sky dims above us.

Inharmonious spectral lines surface and transverse our hearts as the moment of stellar cataclysm approaches...

 

We tether our feelings to simultaneous emissions

that eminate from the small love notes we pass between us.

 

Upon the notes the setting star’s light dances in an infrared array,

absent the harmful ultraviolet rays mercifully filtered away by dense interstellar gases, 

clouds the remnants of old novas, clouds where new stars are now being born…

 

The reduction of stellar sunlight has reordered the oscillations of our hearts,

giving rise to strange, new, confusing and unfamiliar amplitudes and phases that I am now feeling...

 

 

~*~

 

 

In her eyes, I find stored wavelengths of distant galaxies

and find in her photon-raising smiles an electromagnetic attraction that radiates from her abundant store of knowledge.

 

Calculations indicate an upcoming neutron star, although they do not discount an instant black hole;

considering the data, most of our kind refuse to believe such damage to the local radio galaxy could occur;

some simply call our skepticism 'hope'...

 

Here, with her, even during our last moments of observation together,

I am yet as prudence when close to her warm lips as I would be around a violent pulsar;

am yet imbued with caution around her tender touches as I am navigating through loosely-connected quasars;

 

for even if our exotic freedoms swim in hot kisses, distinct prejudices taint the moment,

like those harbored against the selected temperatures, masses, and diameters of our new plasticene suns.

 

A spectroscopic examination revealed aloof perturbations in those around us who are unaware,

units who are impaired by the parallax shifts caused by enchanted nebulosities that were beyond identification;

the authorities would not release their star catalog with such entangling systems of fantasy. 

 

The lunar conditions were no better- appearances of reflective gases gave it a mountainous identity

giving rise to ecliptic feelings that defied the best models created in preparation for long explorations…

 

 

~*~

 

 

Now, all seems at an end as microwave rotations obscure the disheveled artifacts found buried here, 

good ones, too- their geocentric reputations deemed worthy vantage points for cartographical commerce.

 

Even at this late hour, telescopic forces fight with atmospheric machines that are creating celestial illusions.

The most disheartened astrophysicists are trading their views for those of microorganisms from the crafty planets

which survived the last sub-nova outburst.

 

Disinherited qualitative knowledge becomes the basis of a cosmic transformation within us both,

trapping us in a metaphysical tomb at the mercy of an impartial universe and its indifferent phenomena.

 

In a galactic sense, our separate physical entities were as disjointed as the properties of a wayward comet,

encumbered within circular radiations of supernovaic chains that impair string navigation.

 

We activate our acquire-and-analyze devices and allocate all available memory for sensual storage,

and, settling back, converse on the new ectoplasmic breakthroughs with mixed astronomical feelings.

 

Our last moments together are occupied by the theoretical and the observational aspects of astro-identity.

In regards to our present lives we nearly succumb to a transient loyalty, but refuse, and cling to them right to the end.

 

 

 

 

 

               

Author notes

a "what a mostly-robotic cyborg would think" piece...

featured because I thought a few random people might enjoy a piece away from the usual fare; a piece born of (my trademark) passion for complete and utter originality...

This is a 'building-block' piece- begin with terms from one discipline, here it is astrophysics; meld them with an unrelated area, and here it is romantic ideas, feelings, and images; then cast a story-telling spell over the brew, mix in deep sensitivity and thinking and far-reaching, unexplored insights, and last, conjure up the usual interesting-yet-descriptive-and-functional title, and presto, something new, stimulating, enlightening, entertaining, and off the safe and beaten paths... although it does deal with love...

"love is love in any language" -sandygram

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  • star wars fanatic
    September 9, 2007

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    Interesting. The word choice in this was quite complex, and I liked that about it. The story was rather shallow, no internal meaning to me, but, then again, that could be a reflection of the aforesaid robotic love, or, could it be...human love?

    ~Star~

    *finalist*


    • wbiro gold member
      September 16, 2007
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      just getting around to replying here- thank for the honorable... yes- no storyline to speak of here, it was just one scene; as to the love I have to laugh- for us science fiction types put light sabers and tie fighters well before love and emotion... "Gimme some hardware, keep your heart...!" (hey, I might employ that quote someday...) I do have an upcomming picture-book piece based on Lego Star Wars figures that you may find interesting (and maybe deeper, who knows! lol) (yes, no kidding, and I do have a picture-book collection already...!) (and I do have the video game to generate the scenes waiting in the wings...) Happy rebellion...

  • Bad Bill
    August 26, 2007

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    A brilliant melange of astro-physics, robotics, hard-core SF and human emotions! Very original and completely captivating. Terrific work!
    Bill


    • wbiro gold member
      August 26, 2007
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      hey, cool word- "melange", a few stars for that! and thanks for your comment; and I'll assume you represent a large segment of the potential reading audience out there... (for I use AP as a workshop more than a showcase) thanks again...


  • vierna
    August 26, 2007
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    I'm a sci-fi geek, so I loved it. Brilliant work and thanks for sharing!

    • wbiro gold member
      August 26, 2007
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      hey, who said sci-fi lovers are geeks!


  • SexyAngel0418
    August 26, 2007

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    ok... um.... I couldn't get all the way through this one right now... it is the weekend and my brain is turned off... I will bookmark it and finish it later...

    Hugs,
    Beth


  • grannyeri gold member
    August 26, 2007

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    Liked the presentation of this poem - stellar background for this piece. Sounds very prose like and looks paragraph like too but does include some alliteration throughout. Deeper than what I need to know, but very original and well planned write. Good luck in the contest - fits right in.

    • wbiro gold member
      August 26, 2007
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      hey thanks granny, now I have to go and look up alliteration again...!


      • wbiro gold member
        August 26, 2007
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        oh! alliteration! yes...! I do rightly and roundly remember rather retroactively those rays reaping rewards from readers reminiscining in rewritten realms of related roamings...


  • Sandygram silver member
    August 26, 2007
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    Well I kind of got lost in this one. I clicked from the feature so I want to comment. I for one am not a physicist so didn't understand every word but did the general concept. . I commend you on your vocabulary and stunning imagery. Take care, Sandy


    • wbiro gold member
      August 26, 2007

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      thanks Sandy, 5 for bravery! Vocab, check, imagery, check, but the feelings now... I may have some to work to do there...


      • Sandygram silver member
        August 26, 2007

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        Nice Reply

        No your feelings were just fine to. One more Bravo! I am sure with different words for me to comprehend it would be very beautiful. Love is love in any language. Even in words that my simple mind does not quite understand. Take care, Sandy


        • wbiro gold member
          August 26, 2007
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          now that's a great statement, Sandy, (and I suppose it aptly applies here!)- 'love is love in any language'... perhaps I shall note your insight in my author's comments...

          • Sandygram silver member
            August 26, 2007
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            Well thank you sir. That was nice of you to do. You have a great day. Sandy


  • Tristan Storm
    August 26, 2007

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    What talent!

    WOW, what more can I say, This is a most delightful piece. I can hardly fathom most of the words used here (i need to go look them up) yet it all made sense somehow. I loved the feelings you expressed where we usually would have thought it to be a "non feeling" robot to be non pulsed by everything happening. I hope to read some more of your work soon.


    • wbiro gold member
      August 26, 2007
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      thanks for your comment, it was intriguing, and informative, if I generalize (which I will)!


  • Gratitude
    August 26, 2007

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    Very unusual subject material...kudos to you for your bravery there. Many are loth to stray from love, hate and suicide...well done for bieng more original. It's like The Hitchhiker's Guide take on poetry! I am a physicist, so derive a strange brand of amusement from this. Well done. Good to see someone breaking the usual mould.I love way in which you have ended the peice, particularly.


    • wbiro gold member
      August 26, 2007
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      thanks- I'm hoping that a reader doesn't have to be a physicist to enjoy it! (I can tell that your a scientist by your spelling! lol don't change it- it is now courtroom exhibit #1!)

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