I stand before you, and the tears from my heart,
fall, hoping to somehow land in the solace of your love.
Silent pleas escape my lips, begging you to hear me,
look deeper into my eyes, you are certain to discover;
you are my most treasured gift, the reason for this Love.
I breathe profoundly of the essence of your soul.
Exhaling hope in whispers, of how much I love you.
Kissing you with promises, if you will just let me,
of my eternal devotion, my worthiness of your trust.
To have you bound within this dream, that could be us.
A contest entry
- Dance Me To The End of Your Poetic Words...小百合 by Sweet Sorrow.
1000 points, ended August 30, 2007, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This was so sweet, and I could feel the longing and the passion and all that good stuff.
I loved the descriptions you used, it was all so beautiful and resfreshing from what I've recently been reading. Congratualtions on the honorable mention, and lovely poem
Jeanette*~ -
It seems that these love poems you write could have come from my mind, too. We think so alike! It was beautiful and gave me a peaceful feeling, but I also felt the yearning and frustration...
Thank you for writing again!
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Talk about giving yourself to someone.
This was wonderful, I loved the ending, it gave the poem a very refreshing feeling. Hah. lol.
Seriously though, you write beautifully. It's amazing how you just don't ever give up writing about it though. Love is so sticky sometimes, Like post it notes. You can't get rid of the dang things. Lol. Love bound, its funny too cause that makes me think of love as if it was a spell. Love is one weird topic. No one ever wins debating about it. Its hilarious.
Mag-nifty-saunt
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Very good!!!
I feel it needs one more stanza though...either at the end or in the middle
Such beautiful words of a beautiful dream though
Keep them comin!!!!!
Much Love!
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Thank you for reading this, I do hope to expand on it sometime, I know I can as it is just the foundation of my thoughts and these feelings...
the contest at this time only alloted for 10 lines, so there's hope
Thanks again, you're wonderful!
♥
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