'I'm beautiful',
you say;
my thoughts echo
with your words.
How can I be beautiful
and still unloved?
and just then,
I was struck dumb
with a revalation,
and I realized,
it wasn't the lack
of love within your words
that felt like an attack,
but rather,
the patronizing sentiment
they inflected.
After all,
you never loved me,
never would;
so why compliment me
in such a fashion of
false hopes?
I doubt
I'll ever understand
the reasoning
behind the need,
and yet, I linger, still
upon the puzzle
within your words;
'I'm beautiful'.
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Well this is quite a deep poem you've written sweety! but a situation that sounds way too familiar to me too... not in the current situation though, but I understand where this comes from
Only one thing I'd change:
of false hopes
Very well written, beautiful one
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Very different piece from you mum. Wow very deep and scaring. hmmmmmmmmm
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"ever understand" instead of "every understand".
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you are right, this is different than your norm. i really liked the last few stanzas best, and i noted that the tone throughout the write appeared more personal. thank you as always for the entry, bel.
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Very lyrical verse Poetess! As per authors comments. No,no running. But flight on poetic wings is more the case in point. Well done.
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Three lines among these struck me in particular...and I'm not even certain why...
'I'm beautiful',
false hopes?
'I'm beautiful'.
The entire piece is well done, but those three lines just struck a chord with me...almost a "saying what you want to hear" type feel...which for me is VERY wrong.
Perfect title for a piece that certainly would leave anyone puzzled
Best of luck in the contest!
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But you are........
Wonderful Mom!
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