I remember so well
the day I first got you
Sad little brown eyes
looking so lonely and blue
Weighing only 11lbs
at seven months old
Shivering and shaking,
not because it was cold
You were afraid of people,
of every little thing
In your broken heart,
no song for you to sing
Abused by your owner,
kicked around like a ball
Grabbed by your neck,
thrown up against a wall
I saw what was happening,
I had to save your life
To rescue you from this hell,
I had to do what was right
I wrapped you in my sweater
as I put you in my car closing the door
I told this sick man
he could not hurt you anymore
All broken up inside,
malnutrition from not being feed
The vet said it’s a miracle,
your alive and not dead
They told me it was bad,
that you did not have long
I took you home with me
we proved they were wrong
We’ve been together now
for the last eighteen years
The thought of losing you
has always been my biggest fear
They say you have Cancer,
I see you in so much pain
I have to do what’s right
for you once more again
As I look into your eye’s
tears begin to flood my heart
I know the time has come,
to say good bye, it’s time to part
You’re the greatest dog,
my true and loyal friend
I know that your time
will soon come to an end
Please tell me what you think
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canine kudos
I liked the rhyme structure for this great dedication poem to your dog. It gave the poem a pristine body. The storytelling aspect was a smooth texture for me. For me the last two stanza were a little repetitive. In my aural sense, I was imagining the poet choking and crying while saying the last stanza. I love dogs. This was a great read. Thank you for sharing.
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Thank you
my heart feels a great sadness and the tear i can not seem to stop. She is now and always with me til the end of time
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Deeply Saddened
I was sorry to hear of your loss.
I hope your grief does not overtake your joy at having been allowed the blessing of Alpha's company. May she run free and race the wind that swirls and touches us all.
Much Love and Support
Dark
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Thank you so much for all your words. She is running free at last. My LOve for her will continue to grow no matter where she is now. I gave her the name Alpha for a new beginning and now once more she starts another new beginning. Thanks for reading
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This made me tear up...
1st the idea that someone could abuse a helpless animal
and 2nd that you know and have to let go :-(
I'm an animal lover, I nearly lost my baby a couple of years ago. My heart aches for you ~hugs~
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I love dogs...you took us to his suffering he endured...esp with his pain, just sigh
belle
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This is so beautiful and sad at the same time. I can relate to it so personally. First because I love dogs, can't stand to see any animal or human abused. Secondly, I had a dog that I had to have put to sleep. I stayed in the vets office with him until he was gone, crying like I'd lost a child. I know i lost a good friend. Your emotions came through the computer with this one. It is really good.
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This has a true feeling of sadness mixed with gratitude for the eighteen years of companionship. Well written with a good rhyme scheme except for the 9th stanza. Good write.
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Thank you
When I wrote this she was very sick and took a turn for the better. The cancer went into remision. Yesterday at 5:45 she lost the long battle and now my heart feels an even greater sadness than before.
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I got goosebumps on reading this one. That is how I know it's good. This my friend is an excellent write. I lost a dog to kidney failure and she was the sweetest thing. So I know what it is like to lose a dog. I enjoyed the read. Keep it up. Oh yeah thanks for the comment on my poem.
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Just an update
Wednesday March 18th 2009 at 5:45 pm my long time friend Alpha has passed away. She was a loyal and loving dog. We as a family made her last few days with us full of love. She will be missed greatly by all of us.
Thank you for reading this poem
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Oh. This is such a sad little poem that you have going on in here.
What a poor little dog to have such a sad and painful life. I don't know if this based on a true story or not but I have heard of abuse cases like that. And you feel real sad for them because they can't speak out for themselves. I think that you did a good job of expressing yourself here. 
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Just an update
Wednesday March 18th 2009 at 5:45 pm my long time friend Alpha has passed away. She was a loyal and loving dog. We as a family made her last few days with us full of love. She will be missed greatly by all of us.
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I'm sorry to hear that.
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This is based on a true stroy about my dog. She is still with us but her time with us will soon come to an end. Thanks for reading
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It's like losing a family member when you lose your trusty furry friend. At least she won't be suffering anymore. I'm sorry for your loss.
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Just an update
Wednesday March 18th 2009 at 5:45 pm my long time friend Alpha has passed away. She was a loyal and loving dog. We as a family made her last few days with us full of love. She will be missed greatly by all of us.
thank you for reading this poem
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you made me cry with this wonderful piece...smiling thank you
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Just an update
Wednesday March 18th 2009 at 5:45 pm my long time friend Alpha has passed away. She was a loyal and loving dog. We as a family made her last few days with us full of love. She will be missed greatly by all of us.
Thank you for reading this poem
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Yes, dogs can be man's best friend and they love us unconditionally - they are just so glad to be with us and do what they can to make us happy. Such a sad write filled with pain at the upcoming death of this family pet. Easy to read and understand; good rhythm and rhyme, flow and story you share in these lines. Thought I had commented on this before.
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My heart breake for you.
I love you, is my first thought. Your true and brave heart so richly rewarded with love. Sometime two souls are supposed to meet. I am glad the two of yours did. It is so sad that such great love is flanked by such great pain. I glad you could write about it. I know that pain well, I've been to it's well for a drink so many times that I dare not go back.
Now the wording:
"Thoughts of losing you
has always been my greatest fear"
Did you mean "The thought...." I sometimes get caught in the heat of a poem and make this mistake. Or maybe you could rethink the, "has always been my greatest fear" line Look for words that make the fear current, in the moment, or creeping always in the shadows.
I HOPE THIS HELPS.
Much Love
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Just an update
Wednesday March 18th 2009 at 5:45 pm my long time friend Alpha has passed away. She was a loyal and loving dog. We as a family made her last few days with us full of love. She will be missed greatly by all of us.
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Thank you so much for your feedback.
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ALPHA FALPHA hey this poem is really lovely. I love my alpha she soo cute. well this poem was heart felt and it touched me alot because she is a good dog and deserves whats best and you did it.
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