In my fragile heart,
You have put a crack.
I can't create art.
My canvas is black.
I can't crack a smile,
I can't sing a song.
Now I'm so hostile.
It's just so wrong.
I used to have fun,
I used to be free.
But that is all done,
Don't you agree?
I hope you're proud,
Of the damage you caused.
My life's in a shroud,
And it has been paused.
Maybe the day'll come,
When I see the light.
When I won't be so glum,
And I'll live in delight.
That day's far away,
So I live in despair.
Here I sit and decay,
Because of my affair.
Author notes
Option # 2!
This poem is written to myself.
I cheated.
I feel horrible.
I was confused, I'm sorry.
I'm depressed.
Blah Blah Blah.
Basically I hate myself for it.
A contest entry
- A contest for the masses by Danneh.
600 points, ended October 4, 2007, 34 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - an option contest about......stuff lol by Xx52sLittleTrampxX.
450 points, ended October 2, 2007, 17 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Give Me Something Dark by Lost Memory.
350 points, ended September 23, 2007, 18 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Blank Cheque by sca.
777 points, ended November 1, 2007, 48 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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im liking this, its good, and it reminded me of myself, great job and thanks for entering
~Nick
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I really like this. The flow was very good. And the overall meaning of the poem was great. Welcome to my preliminary finalists list. Thank you for entering. I wish you the best of luck in my contest.
aleXox-never stop writing.
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This is a very good write.We all make mistakes in life some big and some small thank you for your entry.Can you please put your username in your authors box for me.Best Wishes
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I can't create art.
My canvas is black. - beautiful lines.
I like the realization and the contemporary touch on this piece. Well done fellow poet.
Thanks so much for sharing and entering in my contest. I wish you all the best. Keep writing my friend.
>>>VIRGOAN
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wow good write. keep it up. i enjoyed the read and good luck in the contest. thanks for entering.
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i love this i write many poems bout myself and stupid mistakes i made. it went well it wasn't boring at all and detailed nicely BUT put the option and your user before i dq your ass lol
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Wow very dark. So expressive and it was like a twist at the end because you couldn't exactly tell it was the narrator talking in 2nd or 3rd person. Like talking to yourself. Awesome write, you're bound to win!
-Nick
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wow
way to express self hate.... interesting take good luck! -
Don't beat yourself up over a single mistake
Not that I'm one to talk but
Your worth more than that.
Good luck
-Danneh<3
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