what do you want from me
say I'm lovely to see too erotic to be
hold my face in your hands what do you want from me
what can I do
lay beautiful man Ill make sweet love
set the world on fire the lightning shall flash
cymbals will crash oh God how long can it last
the candles burn you sit looking at me
slowly returning back in to your dreams
Author notes
Rheea
A contest entry
- Almost anything goes!! O_O by vampireblood.
400 points, ended October 22, 2007, 29 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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very nicely written! I love the line "set the world on fire lightning shall flash". Very powerful and the imagery is great. Also, the line "the candles burn you sit looking at me" send chills up my spine for some reason! very cool. thanks for a fun read
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Beautiful
Very well written, i can see you there. I love it. -
the candles burn...
Very nicely written... dreams can be very powerful omens or just confusing to us in the harsh light of day! This dream sounds like one of the good ones... Excellent!
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wonderful voice and point of view here, the woman as an object speaks of her feelings... quite revealing i think...so very well done...PK
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sentimental
nice write on a dream scene and lover . . -
Wow,
This was a very unique piece here.. Always a pleasure reading someone's thoughts they jot. I wish you all the best in the contest! Peace, and thanks for sharing here. Peace, Timothy aka poeticweaver~
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This was a very interesting piece. It was rather short, but it said alot within the lines =]. I thought overall it flowed nicely. Thank you for entering and best of luck to you in my contest.
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This is beautiful, Rheea. I love the way it flows and the imagery is good. great job. I love these lines:
lay beautiful man Ill make sweet love
set the world on fire the lightning shall flash
cymbals will crash oh God how long can it last
Kat
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thank you for sharing your poetry with me tonight. i am looking forward to reading more from you. viyanna rosemarie
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