people just donīt seem to understand
the things that run through an insane mind
the violent images that are planned
and the bloody sacrifice that is which dined upon
people donīt seem to see how with their words they keep on hurting me
and donīt seem to ever ponder at the the thought of what could be
of them or even of the world
people are conceited and selfish
people are 2 faced and evil they only see themselves
people are the reason for this insane mind
and their lives on this planet are timed
Author notes
MY first poem... by mad emo heartattack
A contest entry
- Enter the very first poem you posted by whispernthedark.
435 points, ended March 26, 2008, 50 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Tell me what you think and dont call me emo or gothic please
Comments
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people are conceded and selfish
should be conceited
This is a great write, I felt this way a long time. Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.
♥
whisper
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Welcome to AllPoetry
mad emo heartattack
First off, I am going to suggest that you to change your background because you can-not see the words at all without highlighting the page and alot of people will not bother to do that, so you will lose some chance of having people read your works.
Second, This is a good poem, The deepness in the poem shows more than 'emo' or 'goth' labels, it sounds more of a depressive mind thoughts; and people who suffer from depression are NOT 'emo' or 'goth', the 'emo's and 'goth's are simply silly little children who listen to too much angry music and believe it.
Great write
I look forward to reading more from you
Enjoy AllPoetry
Stay safe
~Amanda
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