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Wronged



Defenses rise high
in layers created

from life's progression.


Determination's fire rages
against speckled hints of

vulnerabitlity revealed.


In darkened corners,
isolated from view,

tears fall
as spirit seals wounds,

one stitch at a time.


Identity recreated through
protective masks worn;

suffering
at the bottom of
esteem's well,

empty.


Truth lies hidden
beneath wronged years
packed away safe from

rememberance.




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Prompt: Salted Scars

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  • leander Moderators member
    September 15, 2007

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    Another poem that lingers more at the dark side of life, but still worded in a very beautiful and elegant way

    again, some suggestions:


    Determination's fire
    rages against speckled hints
    of vulnerability revealed

    Identity recreated
    through protectvie masks worn;

    of esteem's well

    from remembrance


    Very well done on the prompt hunny


  • Twins 4 me
    August 26, 2007
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    Very powerful and with such strong emotion. The flow was excellent as well. Thanks for entering!


  • Moons Lunar Angel
    August 25, 2007
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  • Bedroom Eyes
    August 25, 2007

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    Can certainly feel the pain in this piece

    Sometimes, no matter how hard me try to keep things bottled up inside, they come spilling out anyways...I think it is our insides telling us that it HAS to come out or we will go crazy

    Poignant and powerful piece here...

    Best of luck in the contest!