Where your legs diverge I was lost, in Eden’s gates
I wandered that path leaving as a trail the wetness of my mouth
The kiss of sins, the reason why the fallen rose
Lust is my name, and your in-between, my place
Your lips… an open door to the delights
Your hair… a falling curtain like the silent night
Your eyes… a sacred path to my desires
Your skin… A hidden river where all reason expires
Going out of air, your redden face looks at me, smiling in surrender
After this dance, this consumed fire; you will dream in my arms
A wordless “I love you” comes along the warm air of your kiss
Your hair touching kindly my chest, where they lie, they rest
A contest entry
- make LOVE to ME!!!! by Nephalaneous lover.
669 points, ended August 27, 2007, 21 entries
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Um, hmmm
Is there really an adjective redden? I suspect it is only a verb. You might want to check your friendly local dictionary. I think to redden something is to add some red dye, or red color, or spank it or something. Your reddish face, or ruddy face is more grammatically correct (I THINK) but like I say, you'll want to look that one up! -
Loving
Erotic and sensual, sensitive and kind,
This from a lover would blow my mind
For too many times I've had to say "Please
We're lovers, we're not enemies
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Amazing
If only... I could have a lover so kind.
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thanks for your comment, nice to hear from you again, Im never tired of reminding you of what a great writer you are
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wow you said it
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thanks
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wow this was very intense, amazingly written, very hot and temp raised...wonderful
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thanks a lot for your comment!
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Wow--what a wonderful poem! My favorite line is "A hidden river where all reason expires." It is so full of vivid images it is not only erotic but beautiful at the same time. Great poem and good luck in the contest⁄
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yeah, I was really pleased with this poem when i finished it thanks for your comment n_n
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