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World's little fool

Shell my head into my hands,
smoke of judgment times of sand.
Drop the world and all its smoke,
shell my head before i choke.

Squinting eyes smothered by tar,
talk of truth come wide and far.
Why follow? the leader's mistaken,
shell my head for we're all forsaken.

Dress in white in full disguise,
fool the world, to your demise.
familiar faces prod and poke,

Shell my head there's too much smoke.

 

Familiar arms are flung wide open,

to lure you out, your shell seems broken...

  

Your shells not broken it's all a trick!

It's sleeping beauty's needle prick!

Shell your head you stupid fool,

ignore the world your just its tool! 

Renew yourself in a smothered face.

Your hands clenched tight in your sacred space.

Decrease the weight in a silent shout

into your hands and let no sound out.

This shell is mine untouched by all those lies, 

Where my mind prevails and the world just dies

 

Don't lift your head and breathe the smoke,

 just shell your head before you choke.

seal the cracks and shut out the noise,

and heal your mind before it destroys 

 

My head's too heavy, my hands too weak,

my shell collapses, noise starts to leak.

Silent screams seem to get louder,

my humble fortress turned into powder.

 

Familiar faces, arms flung open,

why speak out loud? I'm just outspoken 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Virgoan
    August 28, 2007

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    Vocal and demonstrative. Love the realness in this piece.

    Thanks for sharing and I wish you all the best in the contest. Keep writing my friend.

    >>>VIRGOAN


  • Danneh
    August 26, 2007

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    "why speak out loud? I'm just outspoken "
    I absolutely loved this piece..


    I can't tell you how many times I've felt like this myself.. but..

    I have no constructive criticisms. So I'll leave it at that to keep me from rambling on and boring the hell out of you.

    -Danneh<3


    • Puppet-Hands
      August 26, 2007
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      Wow thanks for your comment its always great to be able to relate to people and thanks taking the time to read my poem, for future reference constructive criticism by anyone is always welcome


  • -JuLz-
    August 25, 2007
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    Ahi Paulito, me encanta! very intense! xx