The early Spring that brought the bud and blossom
Brought you and I together to this place
When every look, each word held hidden promise
And every casual touch was an embrace.
When Summer's sunshine coaxed the roses open
day by day our love unfolded too.
As flowers blossomed that buds had hidden
Our love from promise to fulfilment grew.
But season's change and Summers have their passing
And time must shake the petals from the rose
And you and I, my love, now talk of parting
Before the Autumn comes to change our love.
The flowers that you brought in from the garden
Are faded and the Summer's fading too.
But oh, my dear, why should our spirits sadden
Because the flower wont last the whole year through?
Though seasons change they do not die or wither,
The fragile buds of Spring leaf Summer's tree.
The beauty of the blossom is its promise
Of fruit made sweet by seasons yet to be.
So let us face this season's change together.
We'll watch the Autumn turn green into gold.
The blossom's squandered if its fruit's not savoured,
And we'll have wine, my love, when Winter's cold.
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A contest entry
- 18 and Over Without a Trophy by Touchof1der.
425 points, ended September 1, 2007, 4 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - SECOND CHANCES by Turtledove.
650 points, ended September 16, 2007, 9 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Bring My Picture to Life With Your Words! Pre-writes Allowed by pen-inhand.
950 points, ended October 13, 2007, 6 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Share Your Love by CitrineSunrise.
900 points, ended October 8, 2007, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I am a true romantic, I love to read beautiful romance poetry by Entwining Beauty.
450 points, ended November 25, 2007, 28 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - TEN THOUSAND POINTS OF RHYME! (now 15,000) - Part 4 Love by cricketjeff.
1250 points, ended December 27, 2007, 51 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Calling All Writers & Poets Alike....! by B Chandler.
1050 points, ended January 29, 2008, 30 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Valentine's Day -love is in the air by Suna Ketsuma.
530 points, ended March 2, 2008, 25 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - SPRING FEVER Judged by RedwingSpirit.
475 points, ended March 5, 2008, 31 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Fav Me by SomeonesToySoldier.
2625 points, ended October 8, 2008, 33 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - very tough contest :P (don't just sit and enjoy your holidays without poetry ) by abuyi.
1400 points, ended February 22, 44 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I NEED HELP! by AloneForever-.
700 points, ended March 21, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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a beautiful poem, thank you so much for entering
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This was just breath-taking..
exploding with gorgeous imagery
and seasonal love..
amazing write & congrats on the many
trophies won.. well deserved of
Best of luck & thanks for entering
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This is really nice..
I like the message you are giving me
Thank You Ever So Much
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this such beautiful write.. it flows fast and so smooth. at the beginning felt like an migrating animals or hibernating insects who are very delicately balanced with nature .. as they know nature to it true worth but the ending was of love so dear waiting and observing how the time rolls being depressed and still holding hope.
i loved your last para most.. it beautiful and perfect in many aspects... its rhymes as of an ode and imagery is stunning and concludes the write beautifully. if the whole poem had the same format it would be totally in different level.
i like background as i asked in my contest to have some.. it enhances the write. i would love to see this beautiful poem in some colour.
best of luck dear and thanks for entering my contest
regards
abuyi
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Hi. Many thanks for your comment. I appreciate the time and thought you gave to it - especially as you have the contest to deal with. Your appreciation of the poem very much appreciated my friend. Cheers, jimmy
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The blossom's squandered if its fruit's not savoured,
And we'll have wine, my love, when Winter's cold.
love that part...keep up the good work...good luck in my contest and thank you for entering...
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This is very beautifully written. I loved the way you described the change of seasons. This piece was written with such love. I enjoyed the read!!! Thank you for entering my contest
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WOW!!!
Great poem!!
Best wishes in the contest!
Magikal Fairy Poet
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What an awful lot of trophies on one poem! You deserved each one of them, let me tell you. This was great. There was no rhythm or meter problems and your words just danced across the page. I congratulate you on a GREAT write
Good luck in the contest,
Chin up,
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this is a very beautiful poem! thank you so much for entering my contest and i wish you the best of luck! ~CarnalNineTailedFox
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A nice description of a life together.
Drawn from experience? if not then your imagination will lead you to many things.
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This must be the same poet as the last poem. I can tell by your amazing sstory skills and above all your amazing rhyming skills. Not very many poets can rhyme this well and keep the flow too.
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Thanks for joining my contest
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Ah, this is amazing! I love it! I was going to put a few favorite lines down here, but it ended up being about half of the poem. . . so I'll just say I love this poem, all the ideas you've given, and especially the last line.
Wonderful!
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Thank you for your beautiful entry, good luck, Josie
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I really enjoyed this one! I love all of the metaphors and comparisons. Truly makes for a true love poem! Thanks so much for entering these beautiful rhymes.
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This was really good.. I really enjoyed this piece..
Good write..and good luck..
Jetleena
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Excellent write Wow Congrats on all of the trophies.
Thank you for taking the time to enter this poem into my contest I wish you the best of luck with it
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It's a nice write. Very deep and emotional. The rhyme was smooth, which is usually hard to do. Nice job. Thanks for entering.
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that was amazing, im jealous that you can write that good, holy. good luck in my contest!
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This is beautiful... there's no other way to describe it. I don't know what else to say... the flow and rhyme were right on! Thank you for entering my contest!
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Nicely Done
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Natural glow in rythmic flow.So the blush is fading from the rose so to speak.Thank you for your entry,I enjoyed reading.
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Grateful for your comment Suseann. Much appreciated. jimmy
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Excellent Writing
Thanks to Jeff and Sue's Contest I have just now discovered you. I can see there never will be anything to critique, -- JUST ENJOY !
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It seems amazing to call such a beautiful poem a disappointment, but that is only because this time you weren't fighting for gold this time. Another wonderful poem and I hope to see you in the later rounds too.
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To win a prize, whatever colour, in these rhyming contests means you have written an exceptional poem. Each round has attracted a large entry and a lot of very good poetry.
We both want to thank you for the entry and for the pleasure reading it gave us. Please continue to enter the later rounds and especially the Finale announcement coming soon on that.
Thanks again and congratulations
Jeff and Sue
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such a delightful read, of the passing of the seasons.thank you so much for sharing. Success in the contest.
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amazingly written good luck
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This is beautiful and sweet. The poem that can warm my heart today is a touching poem, indeed. The last two stanzas are wonderful. Great job!
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lol... wot tis it tonite? every poem i read has one of my names in it... one tis rose. or the english rose... i loved this. keep up the gr8 work, really enjoyed this piece,
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No question that is really quite and excellent poem, indeed! Marvelous cadence throughout and shows a practiced hand in poetry. (I had some quibble with the rhymescheme changing in two of the stanza.) Overall I loved it! bravo... bravo... bravo.. -
This is simply an amazing poem…I love all the vivid images and the fact that you’ve used the four seasons elegantly…thank you for sharing this wonderful write…
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This is a great poem. Hope you win the contests.
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I love how you brought the seasons and made them tie in with love.
Very cute.
Thank you for entering,
this is really pretty.
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very nicely written! i enjoyed this! good job& good luck! =]
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beautifully written poem, not sure on the rhyming and the flow but still good. thank you for entering
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I enjoyed reading this. It is something that I can relate to. I may not take it the exact way you mean it, but I can relate to it. You are a very talented writer, and I hope to read more of your excellent work. Bravo!! Bravo!! Keep up the good writing. Good luck in the contest.
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seasons changing.
hmmm
dashboard confessionals:stolen may interest you
it has some relevant pieces.
very pretty.
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Wonderful
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Excellent write. Brought my two favorite things together in this piece nature and love. Very well written. Great usage of words. Thanks for entering the contest and good luck.
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Your interpretation of the picture is beautiful. Love and the change of seasons. Your words flow from one line to the next like soft breeze. Very well done, thank you for entering my contest, and for following the rules! Kelly
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Beautiful and very potent in it's message of change and love. I very much enjoyed the read...thanks for sharing. Blue
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This was a beautiful entry.
Best of luck to you in this contest.
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This piece very much comes across as a metaphor/allegory for spending the rest of your life with someone. It covers very well that things will not always necessarily be what they are in the beginning, but if it is strong enough it should survive and flourish and nothing can truly kill it.
Good write and congrats on gold.
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such tender and beautiful write
thankyou this entry, really warms the heart, felt like
we were having that autumn glass of wine with you.
judging will come soon.
ears2hearyou
Kathleen : ))
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The metaphor of seasons is a perfect one to describe marriage or a long term relationship. This poem is poignant and gentle in it's beauty. A truly wonderful piece.
Congratulations ont the well deserved gold!
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aww so sweet, i love the way you go through seasons saying the love will last and so on! It's quite a beautiful poem and paints a ncie picture!, it has a very nice flow! and the words very fitting.
thanks for your entry
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WOW, Amazing!!!
Excellent, I love the images so much
Thnx for entering & Best of Luck
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excellent
An amazing use to of words, truly beautiful. I can barely speak, there is nothing to say about this poem. nothing at all.
Thank you for entering my contest.
Good luck
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oh wooooooooooooooooow.
i can't even comment on this. i feel i wouldn't do it justice. i just fell in love with this poem. immediately. even before i was done reading.
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Truly Golden
Romantic recital given in the backdrop of the Seasons. I love your imagery, and the wording. It's all very special. But it is sad, but true. Too soon lover's tire of one another it seems. "...they do not die or wither." s/b "...they do not die nor wither." It would not jolt the reader so much and break their concentration if you kept the negative there. Like using "neither/nor" as opposed to "either/or". Thanks for entering. Walt.
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Thank you. Of course you're right re the neither/nor - just a slip, thanks for bringing to my attention. Cheers, jimmy
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i think this is beautiful. another one of my faves by you. the ones in between this and your most recent dont sit the best, but i do really really like this one alot. i love the graceful language used to write this poem, it reminds me of the older poetry back in the 20S. i do think the second to last line is off rhythm with the rest of the poem though. just my tiny little opinion. the rest is beautiful.
ps. the title sounds too cheap for this poem. needs a more tasteful one, something of more class.
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This is good but sad to this of a love not lasting. Good imagery. I like "When Summer came and coaxed the roses open
day by day our love unfolded too:" Best to you in the contest
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I think it fits the category perfectly. I often think of the many transitions relations go through as being much the same way the seasons change. You hit this dead on actually. The imagery is perfect and the title fits the theme well. Just because a relationship has a cooling off period doesn't mean it needs to be abandoned. Life and love goes through many stages and you have captured that perfectly here.
I am glad you chose to enter take the time to enter the contest. I enjoyed reading your poem. You did a wonderful job here and I wish you the best of luck.
♥ Touchof1der
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