Noticing her branches, he raises careful fingers
to stroke the underside of her leaves
He traces down her central veins
She reddens
He lights his touch upon her trembling flatness
She bursts with yellow flame
Satisfied with marvel of grace, he turns away
She sheds her autumn dreaming 'til branches are left bare
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wow wow wow what a wonderful write about fall with an awesome sensuality to it
this is positively beautiful my friend. best of luck in the contest. be well and be blessed
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Wow, excellent poem. It is very inventive and unique. Beautiful work, thank you for entering!
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Wow~ very sensual for a season~ its a nice job! HOT HOT HOT~ wow... (/blush)
Thanks for entering my season contest... for a fall write you gave it a summer feel
~ good luck to you!
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Beautifully done, a sad touch to a creative piece. The word play worked well and the flow was brilliant.
Much luck.
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I just caught the double meaning in the title. Awesome!
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Oh, yeah, here's come clappies.
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Such a powerful imagery here. Tantalizing then sad. I absolutely love "She sheds her autumn dreaming". That last line really kind of smacks you in the face with concentrated sorrow after the beautiful images that preceed it. But then, that's what makes that last line hit so hard - the lines that lead up to it. Excellent writing. You rock!
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Beautifully sensual. You've really done the prompt justice.
A stray apostrophe in the last line, perhaps?
DancingRed.
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Ah, thanks for the headsup about the apostrophe, and the nice comment!!!!!!!!!
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