I want
to learn all I can
be an all knowing man
walk the
world without care
plucking clouds from the air
but
i'm wooden.
I need
to know who I am
to be part of these plans
gain the
knowledge required
to jump out of the fire~
but
i'm frightened.
A contest entry
- An Invite Only Contest.................1350 POINTS TOTAL by Heavens Child.
1200 points, ended September 5, 2007, 18 entries
Honorable mention
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Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Wow, an interesting way of writing it-with short bursts of words! The wooden man could even be compared with a normal person, who's afraid of changing his life. Great one! =)
Good luck with the contest! =D
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To admit our fears
Is the one of the steps needed to over come it. Well done, thank you and good luck. -
Ooh, this was good, very good - and well written. The thought to use an image of a 'wooden' man wanting to join everyone else, and rise above them was craftily thought out - particularly as it ties in with the idea of Pinocchio; there's more depth to this poem then originally meets the eye.
Favourite line had to be, "gain the
knowledge required
to jump out of the fire~"
because that's probably a goal that we all strive towards during everday life, but find it difficult to work up the courage to take that final step. There were so many possible metaphors and meanings hidden within this. Wonderful job; and thanks for entering in the contest
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Interesting write here
I think many people are like frozen in time in fear of the adventure like the wooden man good luck in the contest
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I don't believe this belongs in this contest...what could this possibly have to do with infidelity?
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Hmm... the line spacing is interesting, but I don't really catch what you're talking about.
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short but amazing. i think everyone feels at one point or another that they do not know who there are. thankyou so much for entering my contest and good luck!
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Apologies
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I really like this one - well done and thanks for entering.
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A moment we all face, a question we all ask. Will we jump or stay wooden and unknowing. Thanks for the entry
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Unquie poem here. It has greta imagery and it tells a story to. It is almost too long, but not too long, almost on the verge of it, but I will accept it cause I am nice.
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Your first opening lines really catch the readers attention. I love them.
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I think what you've described is part of human nature. If you didn't think / feel this way, I don't think you'd be human. We all want to discover new things, see new places. But we are scared. Fear is a good feeling, as long as its used right.
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pretty neat congrats on the previously won trophy and good luck in the contest
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the simplicity of this gives it a great impact for me.
you're either very simple or very clever, lol.
very good.
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Congratulations on the HM...for this wonderfully thought provoking write. Kudos my friend.
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This was a good write. The flow here was good. All and all an enjoyable read. But, it has nothing to do with the contest. Nowhere in this piece did you explain fear to me. Next time i suggest you read the rules a couple of times if needed.
Thanks for trying.
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Well this is a very interesting peice. I am a little confused though beacuse the one contest you enterd it in say to explain the feeling of fear not a fightful situation. Anyway I still really liked it. Good luck in all your contests!
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It is truly a pity that this contest already has an HM
sorry, but I'm going to have to DQ it despite the fact that it was moving
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I think there is a lot we are all frightened of.... life, the universe and everything in it, can be scary in it's own right and we all want to learn enough about ourselves to push past the fear and live life.... well done
Thank you for taking the time to enter your favourite prewrite in this contest, I wish you the very best of luck
Karen -
A very wise and simple, yet interesting poem. Thanxx for entering my contest, good luck to you.
Luv,
Candy
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A timeless tale. Refreshingly simple. Wishing for what I am not, afraid of what I might become. Afraid of failure and afraid of success. Reminds me of the many I've met, stuck in the depths of despair, held in the grip of self destructive behavior, hating who they are but afraid of taking a leap out of the fire into the unknown. Thank you for entering and sharing your work.
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learning or un-learning ?
knowing or un-knowing ?
wanting, needing, desiring or ... surrendering ?
believing in lack and striving to add more of what we think is lacking or realizing our completeness right now ?
a wonderful and lucid portrait of our usual conditionings that prevent us from tasting the nectar of bliss in the present moment ...
maa
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The wooden man who seems lifeless and soulless in fact owns a thoughtful mind and an earnest heart. But no one can understand his solitude and despair, misery and fear. The conception of this piece is brilliantly creative.
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plucking clouds from the air.
childish and fun with imaginative tongues.
to jump out of the fire.
the concept of wood, fire, flame and oxygen is a great place to collaborate -
Wow this is like a great format great poem overall just amazing thank you for your entry and good luck in the contest!!
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Love the way it's stilted...a very masculine but sensitive style.
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simple is good
What i like the most about your poem is how you structured it. As i read it i felt like i myself had a simple mind, and i could not quite "pluck the clouds from the air".
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yesss. i love this.
its very simple but not simple. lol
great job!!!
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Interesting and thought provoking. It seems that the wooden man is scared of the unknown yet where he is at will surely kill him. I love the metaphors used. Good luck only.
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Very thought provoking and has a mystique that is quite interesting and deep. Good luck in the contst mate.
Barry
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Oh, I like this...very thoughtful, a man feeling his connection to the world, but not quite realizing his own importance and purpose...a universal theme, done up in a unique fashion.
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Watch your last 3 line endings they're a bit ropey and such a shame this is unusual. Make sure you're happy quick. Kindest wishes.
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This is good. Sums up all the fear people have to let themselves go after their goal and dreams
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'The wooden man'......
quoting you;
'pluck a cloud from the air
but
i'm wooden.'.....
thats pertty much says how i feel..you summed it up well in this write.....
delicately spoken too.....
thank you for sharing with me as well as all your friends......
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the more i learn the more i feel small. its childish i know, but i connected with that kind of nervousness while i read this. sometimes learning means realizing how stupid you wre, and that can be hard to handle, this was really neat to experinece, thank you.
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Ummm, it is thought provoking. For myself though, the more i learn, the less carefree i become. I think we all need to feel we are part of a plan, since what other purpose is there for our existence?
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I have had to ready this several times and the more I read the more I like. A few simple words to convey a very deep message, had a easy flow - good luck in the contest.
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Thanks very much indeed.
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hey its very well written ...to the point but well displayed
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I am struck by your poem.. a mastermind poem. The creative power is contemplative. So few words and a lot of brilliance in the thought pattern. The sequence u use knowledge, care, a bit of heaven, plan, fire out, fear involving risk and painful feelings. There is a feel in your poem for freedom and the thrill of daring in a safe adventure. Totally enrapturing.
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Thanks very much indeed.
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'walk this world without care, pluck a cloud from the air' - favorite lines right there, beautifully simplistic, actually think i'd have preferred if you'd cut it short and ended at at wooden but it was still lovely. Loved the concept and the idea behind it and just generally thought it was a beautifull piece of writing.
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i like this simply put put simple this are beautiful things yeah tis ticked all the boxes for me graet writing and the best of luck in the contest
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fear is so disabling and your words show that. there seems to be a certain comfort in what we know and are used to. wanting something new or better is an unknown... we end up staying where it's 'safe' rather than take a chance... that's fear for ya
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Something fitting for Pinocchio to think - many of us have felt like this - wooden, unfeeling at times - depressed and not sure how to get out of it. Liked the brevity of the lines, the thoughts shared in these lines.
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The words used may be simple--the content, however, is anything but! You have expressed a universal truth about the human condition--we are all subject to doubts and fear, feelings of inadequacy, etc. Yet we survive (or most of us do). You may be frightened, my friend, but your poetry is definitely NOT wooden!
Bill
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This is very interesting and thought provoking.
I am sure that we have all felt like this at one point in time. To be more than what we are and be able to do the things that we can only dream is every one's goal in life. We are constantly surrounded by so many questions and fears in our lives. It would be a wonderful feeling to one day come out of the box that holds us in and experience the world in a different light. Well done and thanks for sharing this one!
Good luck to you with it in the contest!
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Simple and expressive. To "walk the world without care" and "gain the knowledge required to jump out of the fire" one has to overcome fear... to take a leap of faith. We are constantly surrounded by things that make us afriad. Fear can paralyze us ... keep us from making progress in our lives. The trick is learning to face life ... even while feeling afraid.
Thanks for the read. Good luck in the contest! ....JustBreathe
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I liked this too. I think we are all frightened at times but dont let fear stop you. Good luck in the contest
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we're all frightened..fear is a great motivator..as is curiosity... i really liked this floors! peace and harmony... desi
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