No matter how far you are I feel you next to me
Your sweet kiss haunting all of my dreams
I’m sorry my darling I’m trying to explain why
Your love helps me each day stay alive
Every breath I take is so I will see you again
Every time I smile it’s because I feel no pain
It was angels who chose me to be your one and only
Until the end of time
Every breath I take it is so I can feel you
Every time I smile it’s because you’re smiling too
It was demons who chose me to be your one and only
Until the end of time
Time is no issue as I will love you till I die
And even then my love for you will survive
Everything else means nothing I give you it all
As I know you will never let me fall
Every breath I take is so I will see you again
Every time I smile it’s because I feel no pain
It was angels who chose me to be your one and only
Until the end of time
Every breath I take it is so I can feel you
Every time I smile it’s because you’re smiling too
It was demons who chose me to be your one and only
Until the end of time
Author notes
I know this song is very different to the one i usually write,plus its alot shorter.But then again if your a regular reader then you'll know that i put EVERYTHING in write on this thing.
i have it
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This is amazing. The contrast between the second stanza and the last was wonderfully perfect.
Thank you for entering and all the best in the contest.
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this was a great write.
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Its good
I loved it!!
Goodluck in my contest!
xxx
Eli -
0 i like dis...
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This is a very beautiful song. You can tell that you are very much so in love!
Wonderful Job!
~Phoenix -
sweet and beautifully written, well done, thanks for entering and good luc
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‘Time is no issue as I will love you till I die
And even then my love for you will survive…’ thank you for sharing a heartwarming song about everlasting love…
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Every breath I take is so I will see you again
Every time I smile it’s because I feel no pain
It was angels who chose me to be your one and only
Until the end of time
Every breath I take it is so I can feel you
Every time I smile it’s because you’re smiling too
It was demons who chose me to be your one and only
Until the end of time
These lines have touched me deep down inside, I love it thank you so much for entering and best of luck to you as well!! -
Very nicely written for the chosen prompt, isn't love a grand thing? I was going to say it read like a song, then I read your notes
Well done...Scott
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Thank you for your beautiful entry, Josephine
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this was amazing
it was full of love
it was immensely sweet
the devotion to one you love is amazing
the sentimentality and pure love
wanting to be with them forever,
i can relate to what you are sayin
and i liked the style as well, the "every breath" thing, reminds me abit of how i used to write.
well done and good luck
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Very nice... thanks for entering!
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oh wow this was GREAT!!! thank you soo much for entering!! ireally did love this!! good luck in the contest...
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Sweet.
Awwwh.
Made me smile, which is good.
Thank you for entering hon.
x
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Great poem, I liked it very much.
Thanks for you entry.
ephiphany
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love it its awesome!
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I liked this poem, but it was more...sentimental and sweet rather than a tearjerker for me. That doesn't make it no less of a great poem, though!
Only thing I would suggest fixing is in the third stanza, third line: 'Everything else means nothing I give you it all'. That wording at the end sounds VERY awkward, and it interrupted the flow of the poem in my mind. I do however like the subject matter and the devotion seen in this piece. I can honestly say I know how you feel, because I feel the same way for a certain someone.
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You never told me in your author's notes what song you did.
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