You may be with me.
But you don't love me.
You haven't for a long time.
You hold me.
But think of her.
I see it in your eyes.
Love can't wear a disguise.
And a heart isn't some prize
you win at a fair.
It needs nurtured and loved
with the life you share.
It needs honesty and tenderness
passion beneath a kiss,
not an empty promise
to come and hurt me later.
She has someone else.
Someone she adores
so you stay with me
instead of running with cheap whores.
Your eyes are the mirror to my soul.
The aching hurt I feel
swallows me whole.
All I can say is
Go be her fool.
Author notes
Once again.. came to me at work...I write best about tragedy... I believe that it has to be really bad sometimes.. so you can appreciate how good it can get..
hence my mantra.. Life is a BALANCE
A contest entry
- Giving Up On That Thing Called Love by xxRainbowDawnxx.
300 points, ended October 2, 2007, 13 entries
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I couldn't bare to think of him thinking of someone else whilst he held me. Not to say he was, but putting myself in the persona of the person you are writing about. Heart wrenching and hurtful, I can relate in a deep sense as I fear him falling for someone else.
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This is a good piece telling a story of how it is; no messing. You can picture the scenario well so a good write. Well done, keep writing...Kindest wishes always
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hmm good way of thinking of things mom. i think this is a very good piece. and in a way i went through it. lol. mitch loved another while i loved another but he kept wanting me to be with him. so it is a great write. it shows how it truly is. and that life isnt always as bad as it may seem to us. love this piece.
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thanx hun glad you liked it
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The best writing i find tend to come without thinking about it. Some ask where i get my ideas of what to write I usually tell them i have no idea They just happen. Tragedy always pulls the reader in , as we have all at some time been there A fine write with good flow and rhyme
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