I would walk a distance
In the pouring rain
To see your face
I am
Hopelessly falling for you
Like endless raindrops
That hit the ground
Repeatedly and
You dont realize how much you mean to me
And it kills knowing you'll never know
My true feelings for you
But friends, we shall remain
Forever and eternally
My love for you will stay in my notebook
With all the ink hearts and kiss marks
Stained to the filled papers
That cant hold anymore emotions
And its the only memory I have of you
Sitting in my room watching the rain fall
All night long until I fall
Into a deep sleep and dreams of you
Float in my head nonstop
I cant escape nor forget
Wake up! Be free
Like the wind and skies so high above
Here I go again
Step foot outside my door
Without an umbrella, I run
To you with all my strength
Never to let you slip out of my arms
Ever again, for I am the one who loves you
Open your eyes and see
Shes not in love with you
Stop saying she is
The rain is falling uncontrolabley
It is never too late
To say "I love you"
While dancing in the rain
Watch it pour and drip like a waterfall
Listen to the grey skies
Whisper a song of joy
For finally you are mine
And I am yours
Forever more and
Hear the thunder crash
With loud bursts of love
The lightning clashes and
The trees sway like
Ballet dancers in the rain
Catching one another fall
Hopelessly
Twirling and spinning for
The rejoice of life and love
Rain pours down on me and you
Endlessly, Eternally, Hopelessly
Fallen for you
Author notes
I got inspired off a picture for this. I hope you enjoyed it!! This is a fantasy dream sorta type thing and I thought it was cute.
*parrot*
Option B
3. Rain and Love
Option 2...Write about falling in love
A contest entry
- PIF Three Day Contest-"It Can't Rain All The Time" by SerenityNChains.
800 points, ended August 27, 2007, 5 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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700 points, ended September 7, 2007, 18 entries
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450 points, ended September 13, 2007, 23 entries
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450 points, ended September 10, 2007, 13 entries
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300 points, ended September 7, 2007, 11 entries
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700 points, ended September 8, 2007, 17 entries
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600 points, ended September 12, 2007, 15 entries
Honorable mention
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600 points, ended September 26, 2007, 108 entries
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419 points, ended September 16, 2007, 19 entries
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310 points, ended November 26, 2007, 37 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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beautiful
i envy the object of your affection
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This is really good! I really liked the part To say "I love you"
While dancing in the rain
Watch it pour and drip like a waterfall
Listen to the grey skies
Good job!
Good luck in the contest
-Erin Lynn -
Hmm ... I do feel like this is more of a rant than a poem. One thing about this is that the topic is well overused and there is no shortage of unrequited love - so many poems are formed about this. I'm not telling you to stop writing it, but the key is to do something unique and original. My first poem ever written was of the same sort - I'd like to think that I have improved.
Thank you for entering and good luck in the contest
Never ♥ -
Great poem. It was fun to read. Thanks for entering!
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"That cant hold no more emotions" is terrible grammar."Shes not in love with you;Stop saying she is" are pretty weak lines.
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This is a really good poem! My favorite lines would have to be: To say "I love you"
While dancing in the rain
Watch it pour and drip like a waterfall
Listen to the grey skies
Whisper a song of joy
For finally you are mine
And I am yours
Forever more
Good luck in the contest!
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In this line "that cant hold no more emotions" you used a double negative... so even though i know that you meant that the notebook cant hold anymore emotions.... it reads that the notebook can because one negative cancels out the other. "I cant escape nor forget" you should have just said or forget. But, on a lighter note and away from all of those double negatives.... the poem was all together a good poem... it isnt really about a personal experience encounter of love but it was still nice to read about... i mean to say that in your author note you said that you were inspired by a picture so it doesnt seem like this was also a personal experience.... i may be jumping to conclusions though... let me know... thank you for entering and keep up the great writting.
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This is a very good poem. Very nicely flowing poem. I'm sorry that you cannot win in my contest because of how many contests you are entered in and because you have already won trophies. (see description of rules). Thank you for entering.
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THIS WAS BEAUTIFUL AND WOULD HAVE WENT INTO MY FINALIST LIST BUT IT ALREADY HAS A TROPHY AND IN THE RULSE NO POEMS WITH TROPHYS ALREADY WON..... UNLESS ITS JUST AN HONORABLE MENTION THAN THAT WOULD BE OK....
FEEL FREE TO ENTER ANOTHER I THINK THERE ARE 6 MORE ENTRIES REMAINING
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THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR ENTERING THIS WONDERFUL PIECE INTO MY CONTEST!!!!!!!-----
WISHING YOU MUCH LOVE----
AND GOOD LUCK!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
XxLisaJazminexX
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thank you for this entry.
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Good Job, and good luck!
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this indeed was well penned and spoke in heavy volume.
great job with it and best wishes in all you endeavor,
blessings
tory -
This is beautiful! Good luck in the contest!
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"It is never too late
To say "I love you"
While dancing in the rain"
I loved this part, you are really talented for someone so young. congrats on the trophies
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thank you for sharing your talent with me through this wonderful write. i wish you well in the contest that we both have entered. i am looking forward to reading more from you in the near future. viyanna rosemarie
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It's that Good!
like wow..its amazing, you have a great imagination. every line had great expression. i didn't want to stop reading, it was so good and i hope you keep writing, you have an awesome talent, good luck.
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Great write
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Yes, this is very good. I loved every moment I spent reading this. Great write!
~Lorissa~ -
Very nice. I hope this is the way my situation will end. Great write. It flowed ok but the way you have it spaced is distracting from it's beauty. Thanks for the entry.
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This was a beautiful poem that was well written I enjyed reding it. Good luck
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I loved the imagery you portrayed... It was a beautiful story in poetic form.
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Adorable
the last lines mad me laugh
thinking about wet trees doing ballet!
awesome metaphor
really sweet write
good luck in my contest
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It is cute!!
I like it so much
Thnx for entering & Best of Luck
GloriousGift
Heba -
this was great i enjoyed every second of it!
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great write. thanks for entering and good luck in my contest.
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The line "That cant hold no more emotions" is gramatically incorrect, as is "Shes not in love with you", "Catching one another fall". But other than that, this was a great poem. I loved how you turned thunder into a good thing. Some of the verses were a bit shaky, but overall I liked this a lot.
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The rejoice of life and love
Rain pours down on me and you
Endlessly, Eternally, Hopelessly
Fallen for you
this speaks for the whole poem
Riftkin -
Wow that was very good!
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imagery is really good and the emotion is just right it doesn't seem too over the top and it doesn't by my standrads lack of anything
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very nice, i just love the imagery. i can see it all unfolding in front of my eyes, and the whole scene looks absolutly beautiful. i will accept this a secret so thanks for entering and good luck..
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this is good i liked the way you used rain i love rain thank you for entering
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DQed read the rules please...
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ah a fantasydream type poem... yup it has fantasy in it... it's good!
which really is a great thing because i love this poem. i love everything about it. it's such a sweet love poem.
good luck in my contest!
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Ballet dancers in the rain
Catching one another fall
Hopelessly
Wonderful imagery!
Hopelessly we dwell in a world full of hopes and dreams.
Thanks for sharing and I wish you all the best in the contest. Keep writing my friend.
>>>VIRGOAN
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Very deep. Rain brings forth so many emotions in us, and love and longing seem to be the best. Thank you for this wonderful entry.
Blessed be,
Billie Jean
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This is a beautiful poem, grand flow and imagery just a lovely write thank you for entering it into this contest...
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Simply Beautiful.
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