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dedication for Tenderwolf's recovery
In a list
A contest entry
- 8-Hour Quickie by Laura Lamarca.
450 points, ended August 24, 2007, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Unto Your Heart....(FOR TENDER WOLF)ALL POINTS STANDING AT 21444 ON MY ACCOUNT - WOW!!!! by anaisnais.
23003 points, ended October 28, 2007, 35 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Your BEST Prewrite! - For Mike [degarmo] - by Never Fall in Love.
950 points, ended October 29, 2007, 146 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Pre-writes & Fresh Writes by LadyUnique.
400 points, ended March 7, 63 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Worthy of Gold by Virgoan.
900 points, ended April 17, 84 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Turn your Green Trophies into Bronze, Silver or Gold (2) by DavidTennantRocks.
600 points, ended July 17, 36 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Largest Contest On AP!!!! by Midnight-x-Rose.
3000 points, ended August 26, 2382 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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This is such a beautiful poem. I like your decription of morning. It is very peaceful. Enjoyed the read! Thank you for entering my contest.
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thank u
thank u for the wonderful praises given to my poem, and thank u for the gold too. Kendhal22
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nice write...very gentle and peaceful. I am afraid though that it is over the 24 line limit.
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This is very beautiful background and the poem.
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thank u
thank u for the applaudes and the wonderful comments given to my poem. Kendhal22
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i like the sound and peacefulness of this piece. it was able to talk to me and calmed my mood. very well done
thanks for sharing and keep writing.
HENSLEY
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Individually neat!
...and standing amid the love of your heart, tender, sweet!
I absolutely love the visual effect that this poem left on me... Morning is so the treasure, and it is as gentle is its rise, as the fresh awakening, in a new borne eyes...
Beautifully crafted poem... I loved it oh so much!
You talent is honed and has had on me a graceful effect!
~ James ~
. Rewarded 6
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Thank u
Thank u for the wonderful critique given to my poem.I'm glad that I have made u smile and that u welcome things with an opened mine. Kendhal22
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< thank u
I remembered the times I woke up at the lake and brought back alot of good memories how I felt on that first spring break camping with my kids in Virginia where my mom and dad grew up and spent some time. Kendhal22 -
I love the font and re-reading this. It has an ethereal quality that almost negates the meaning as one is blown along 'sweet as nectar and petals silk milk discreet'. However, I'm not sure about the capitaliseation I feel it distracts from the flow and it becomes somewhat halting. Thank you for a lovely read.
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thank you for your entry and good luck
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BREATH TAKING
It filled my heart with a tenderness and a little smile rest upon my lips
I'm so touched by your sweet words and the wonderful pictures you have penned
Niaish my friend!
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Thank u
This for u my friend onto a speedy recovery and the wonderful penn's given to allpoetry. See u back here real soon. I'm glad u liked my penn. Kendhal22
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i would like to thank you for sharing your talent with me through this wonderful write. i wish you well in the contest that we both have entered. i am looking forward to reading more from you in the near future. viyanna rosemarie
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I was amazed how this poem turned out. It came to me that morning and didn't get to finish with the rest of with the rest of the poem. I thank u for reading my poem and the wonderful critique. Kendhal22
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Oh. This is a nice little poem that you have going on here. I like this. I thought it was kind of neat about how you put up the original version first and then you put a revised version so we could see how your work looks after you've put some more time into it. I thought that was kind of neat. You did a good job of expressing yourself here.
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Evening
Where odd grammar scatters wind-blown seeds
Poetic blooms beyond verbal sunlit horizons
Illuminates fructive images that manifest euphoric
Sweetly caressed incumbent senses
. Rewarded 4
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Thank u
This is beautiful how u describe the evening.Thank u for the sentiments given to my poem. But evening r mere lovers in the plain joined as one given each other a praise. At the end of the night she stands renewed in awe of the light shined through darkness. Kendhal22.
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All that is dark will shine once again
Surely it is of renewal that you speak, that the sun rises this we cannot negate, yet what beauty lies hidden in the moment that some might simply not see.
It does appear to me that she stands renewed for all good men and women to enjoy is the strongest of sentiments for life is no more than a string of days and disconnected events.
I like it, I like it so.
. Rewarded 6
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Finally someone understood my poem in the deepest norm. That light will shine through the darkness, which is morning. Thank u for getting the meaning of the poem and the wonderful sentiments given. Kendhal22
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this was really nice. Not exactly what I was expecting. a nice surprise indeed. I am glad I clicked. Thank you for sharing. Keep up the great work. peace and light always in all ways, Kendal
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The mood is set from the first line
You carry us softly through a world that you view pointing out the things we should notice. We all huddle together for the ride and enjoy each mention. The mood is never lost throughout which is hard to do. So many wonderful lines but my favorite is: she swallowed in morning...caught. You have a unique way with words that touch the reader in a way that you may not realize yourself.
Penquinpoet
. Rewarded 8
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thank u
thank u for the wonderful comments on my poem. I love reading such high praises, which helps me grow as a poet. I'm honored that u liked the lines.Kendhal22
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this was amazing
wonderfuly done
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thank u
thank u for the wonderful critiques given to my poem. My style of writing is useally dark, but this one started taking on life on its own, and poured out of me to write it down. I want to thank u for the applaudes given as well. Kendhal22
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Really a beautiful poem. This isn't usually the type I like to read, but your words flowed so well and there were some incredible lines in there. Really nice work.
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thank u
thank u for the praises given to my poem. I'm overwhelm of the resposes I've recieved towards this poem. I feel pleased of this work and the critiques and comments I've read on my poem. Kendhal22
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I love the rhyme jump on this. It is very lovely and flowed well.
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This is truely lovely.
I like the way it's set out and presented. I love the rhyming and the way it fits together.
I enjoyed
"Standing at the edge of morning smelling of sweet
Remembrance of the newness of love once had
Sweet as nectar and petals silk milk discreet
Painted her of solitude in the brisk edge add"
It appears to me to have alot of meaning and it's really good.
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thank u
Thank u for enjoying my lines and the wonderful critique given here on my poem. Like I said that the contest was set up for sixty words, and I knew the poem wasn't finished because my inspiritation. Useally I feel it when I write my lines that the poem is starting to pour out of me and write it all down feels just right even if by given a portion only for the contest. Kendhal22
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Intensely thought provoking
My first impression was of mist over the sea, in the early morning,then after reading all of the poem I found it was over a lake. Emotionally this is very intensely personal of someone deeply in love.Because of the way it was written it tended to be a bit awkward but made sense in an interesting way. I would not know how to change this. The title states just what the poem is about in the beginning. The first line makes you want to keep reading to find out what comes next. The last line sums up this in a unique way. A very thought provoking idea.
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On the basis of the contest I was only limited to sixty words, which made this impossible to finish. It came to me that morning just felt how new love felt like morning. Hoped u enjoyed this poem as I enjoyed finishing it after the contest. Kendhal22
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There are some knock-out lines in this poem. For example the first line: "I'm solitude alive in touch of mist, fall/ On the lake singled a complexity air/ where smelled innocence/"--the second line is also complex and wonderful. Some of the images (e.g. "mist blossom") are outstanding. Good luck in the contest!
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I agree with Laura..This piece was good but it seemed to have holes that needed to be filled. I think that if you really got into it, you would be able to fill them.
I enjoyed the read and think it has great potential.
Soulful Woman
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I wanted to bring more into the poem, but trying to go with guidelines of the contest was bit tighten. But I still can finish the poem which is the beginning of the poem I originally started and bring in the morning basis on the picture she had in the contest. But I'm not through with the poem yet its only the beginning.
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I think this is a very good beginning to a very great write. I feel that to conform to contest requirement and keep it under 60 words, you've had to minimize somewhat and some of the overall atmosphere has been lost. I also feel the content took a backseat to the rhyme scheme. Without restrictions of this contest, and with the freedom to express yourself, I believe this could be a very good write indeed. Thanks for entering and good luck in the judging. La x
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