Never be afraid to wish
Or be afraid to leap
Never be afraid to dream
Or dive into the deep
You control your destiny
The choices that you make
You can choose to give your all
Don't choose just to take
You will do things worth being proud of
You will do things you'll regret
But don't be afraid to dance in the rain
Just for fear of getting wet
Life is an adventure
Don't let it pass you by
Some of the best times will make you laugh
Others will make you cry
Never be afraid to stand up for what you think is right
Never ever forget your beliefs
Or go down without a fight
In your life you'll learn
To believe in what you can't see
You'll learn the only way life's worth living is if you're truly free
A contest entry
- Cheer Up a Depressed Girl by Oleander.
630 points, ended December 14, 2007, 18 entries
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Honorable mention
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The concept behind the poem is very true and it's something people can always stand to hear. thanks for entering,
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Nice work. Thank you very much for this entry! Keep up your amazing work! and best of luck in the contests.
Crimson -
WOW
This is a poem that people should read to know that they should believe in themselves. Very good rhyming skils,I love the flow...Love it!!
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Or go down without a fight
In your life you'll learn
To believe in what you can't see
You'll learn the only way life's worthing living is if you're truly free
what a truth you are touching here..so philosophical and so touching as well..but yes this is life my friend..a thought provoking piece and making us to ponder about the depth of the issue raised here..well done and the logic is quite powerfulbut this is indeed a poem to make ponder my friend..
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You have a strong and powerful message captured within the lines here
you have done a wonderful job with this!
Just a few oopsies I found:
First line: There's one "be" too much in there
Fifth line: "you" should be 'your'
Last line: "worthing" should be 'worth'
Keep it up,
Leander -
10/10
I think this poem is amazing. I love it. Now become my favourite peom. I really like the last line!
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