Every morn' I awake
Hoping you'll love me today.
Every eve' I lie down
In agonizing pain.
You're so close,
But you seem so far away.
Should I wish to
I could reach out,
And hold you,
But you wouldn't feel me.
I'm wandering around in a thunderstorm-
Letting the rain fall down on me
To mask the tears
Cascading down my face.
Listening to the thunder,
As it reverberates in my soul
Matching the ache of my heart.
The pain is so intense
I wish I could rip my heart out of my chest,
So I could avoid the pain-
But I can't.
I already gave it to you.
God please heal this aching heart of mine,
Or Let me hold her one last time.
I just want to hold her in my arms again
And again feel her warmth so close to me,
And feel her heart beating against my chest.
All I want is some one to hold,
But I don't just want some one,
Because I don't just love some one,
I love her.
Can you hear me?
I love you-
And I wont ever stop.
A contest entry
- Let's Talk About Love (Members only For Romantics Dreamers) by jasminerose.
700 points, ended September 21, 2007, 18 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Wow i want this one too...lol very pretty dear !!!!!
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great work
i could feel the pain as i read it. its wonderful and sad at the same time.
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mildly stalker-ish
Impressive. Thank you for your entry in my contest and good luck! -
Not bad. I could tell that you wrote this with heart.
Good luck! -
I'm wandering around in a thunderstorm-
Letting the rain fall down on me
To mask the tears
Cascading down my face.
Listening to the thunder,
As it reverberates in my soul
Matching the ache of my heart.
Wow.This is awesome,
its great,
so much emotion,
and
it sounds just great.
I personally love it,
you have got great
talent
man.
Great.
....
Simply.....great.
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Dear Raven, such sadness in every word for the longing of all that once was
A beautifully written poem, expressed with so much love that still lingers and shall for time to come
Have hope as your heart shall heal and love's door will open once again for you!
Thank you for this emotional entry to my contest!
Linda
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Very Beautiful
I Have Come To read You Beautiful Poem, Ravenheart, and It Is, Just That!!! Lovely, In Every Sense Of 'The Word!! I Commend You, For A Lasting Impression, Of A Poem.'Good Luck, In Lindas' Contest...'God Bless Also'.Love, Shirley ann shaw-raytown,mo....You Have An Extensive Vocabulary, Again, For SOMEONE, ONLY 18!!!I Think YOU ARE VERY TALENTED~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~`
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A strong emotional poem from the heart. It's almost you are speaking my words in a way. Deep intense when you feel to rip your heart from your chest.. many times i felt the same way. There is tons of love in taste of many delightful moments to come. Don't worry. What is important is what followed especially after a feast of i love yous forever, don't ever leave mes, can't live with yous, you are my only One.. it's an hopeful journey toward deeper intimacy in trust and deeper love. Always in understanding of each other. I gave a wonderful gift to my husband this morning coz i love him. I need him and i believe in him. He is an amazing man. This poem is the best i ever read. Framed. It won't ever stop i agree
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This is so wonderfully sad, painful, &loving. I loved every word u have wrote, because even tho I'm just a teenager, I've felt like this 2. &I can't say I loved just a single line or stanza, because I loved it all! Again, wonderful write.
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Absolutely stunning..I love stanza 4, that touched me the most... I do think that if you changed the color of the writing it would read better..Wonderful work. Good luck in the contest.
Soulful Woman
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Aw! It makes me want to cry. Such passionate love and it never fades. Very deep and very unique. Great read!
Miss Marie
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