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Last Kiss

Surrounded by ghostly figures in white
Blinded by an unforgiving light
I hear you praying by my ear
Your voice is quivering full of fear
You raise your head trying to hide
All the tears that you have cried
You fake a smile trying to be brave
But I knew the news was grave
She said "You're going to be just fine"
I smile taking comfort in her lie
I take her hand weakly in mine
Our fingers and hearts intertwine
Getting tired now...losing my grip
At the last moment we were joined at the lips
Savoring our very last kiss...

Author notes

Had this dream sometime ago, took me about two and a half months to get it to where I didn't think it was too bad, hope you enjoy it.

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  • LeilaJayne
    May 10, 2008

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    Just a quick comment to say thanks for entering this into my contest, sorry you didnt win but obviously there can only be three trophies given, which is a shame cause in this contest there deserved to be alot more winners! xxx


  • onapedestalIstand
    May 6, 2008

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    this is a really goow write..very emotional..wonderful expression or your love for eachother=]!!thanks for entering


  • power2chrm
    August 24, 2007

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    This is a great piece! You tugged at my heart strings,
    thats what it's all about...stirring emotion in someone else. Job well done! Keep writing.

  • emotion-explosion
    August 24, 2007
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    very sad, but has a very sweet ending to it. great write and good luck!


  • edit my world.
    August 24, 2007

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    wow, this is so sad. I like it...its just so sad.
    Dont forget to add your AP name to the authors notes.
    But i like this...it came from your heart and i can tell. Thanks for entering, good job and good luck
    <3Dani

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